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Please continue this story, it's looking absolutely fantastic so far!

This was beautifully written! I love the idea you have for this story and would love to hear more. It kind of reminds me of Sherrilyn Kenyon's "Fantasy Lover." Please update soon.

I like your premise very much, but I felt like I needed more dialog and more of a set up in order to become more invested in your story.

One thing that ate at me: I don't know of many parents who would send their 18 or 19 year old daughter out to a cabin alone for the entire summer with no electricity or running water without a good reason. Especially since no electricity equals no easy way to contact them (i.e. land line, cell phone, or e-mail...yes she can do that in town, but what about an emergency?). It seems like Kerry is a good girl, so I can't seem to find a decent motivation behind her parents' action...especially considering she is the youngest and the only daughter. Being able to stand on her own two feet doesn't seem realistic enough to me. It just seems like, as the author, you needed to isolate Kerry to introduce Zadin into her life and this was the easiest way.

That being said, I definitely want to know what happens next. I suspect Zadin will invade Kerry's dreams first, which ought to be fun.

Thank you for sharing!

I love where you are going with this. Hope you're going to continue. *sorry for the short review. dunno what else to add*