rate_review Reviews

I really like this story and what you've done with it so far...we're getting all these different facets of characters and I can't wait for the next chapter. ;)
& instead of another story, I'd much rather you add to this one as I'm hooked & want to know what happens next! lol

Please update soon! This is such a great and interesting story!

Please update the story soon! It is really great and I can't wait to see where it is going!

Thing one... first several paragraphs aren't spaced right. Thing two you get overly descriptive where a few words would do better. (See description of ring tone) thing three in first few paragraphs use of plural pronoun when only referring to a single person was VERY confusing. It sounded interesting but I can't read anymore of it until I'm in a mood to stop caring about quality. This is ALL VERY EASY TO FIX with one little thing... Get a beta... Their on the forums advertising and there is a place to ask for one there too.

Please post more soon!!!