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What the HELL!? fadsjf;lasjd AHHHH!

O_O Bad bad bad cliffhanger, :(! I hope this update's soon, James seems very sexy.....XD you're killing me!

Well this is certainly an interesting story! I like it so far and can't wait to read more soon!

Your story is good, but it really needs a lot of work as far as proofreading. The second chapter, James, is misspelled. You also tend to confuse verbs, i.e., you write happen, when the correct word is happened. The same for arrive and arrived, recognized, should have been recognize, etc. Also, you referred to the homeroom teacher as a he, but then said the name as Mrs. Marks. Anyway, it is a very interesting story, just make sure you reread it before you post it. The errors get in the way of the story. If you need a proofreader, email me at LisaT25@msn.com

Wow. Great beginning to Mr. Right. I hope nothing is wrong with James. He seems so sweet and honest Looking forward to reading more.