rate_review Reviews

Please continue and update this story!

This story has a lot of potential, but it needs a beta to refine it. A few mistakes here and there are easily forgivable. Some punctuation and a more clear timeline would help. Too many flashbacks without notifying can make a story confusing. Other than that, you've got a great ploline that draws the reader in. Keep it going!

Not too shabby... Then again, something about girls cheating or guys liking to watch their girls cheat turns me on, so I'll definitely be looking to this in case it goes where I think it is going.