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sry to bring this up but through out chapter 17 or plus you keep calling rufus , hugo but hugo dead.... jsut thought I*d bring that up


love the story, the name switching just got confussing....keep up the good work!

Eh? Chapter 16 and 17 said Hugo when Hugo died and it's supposed to be Rufus that's lived. Is it a typo then?

I really like this story, only in chapter 19 the grandpa should be Rufus not Hugo. Hugo DID get killed by Rufus in ch18, right? sorry if I'm meddling

Gael´s grandfather is really disgusting.
Help somebody Jeremy!

pls MORE ^_^

Gael is really asshole.
Oh...Jeremy...*sob*...baby...*sob*

A/N: To crazy kitty, you will be getting your answer soon. but not now. hehehe.......*pout*....:)

Was Adrian raped and killed by his husband?

Deffinate improvement with the writing :) Very enjoyable to read and very well written too, I greatly enjoyed it, you're writing's really evolved as the story has progressed. I like the twist of events at the end too, it was unexpected and very dramatic. As usual I look forward to more. Great job!

I hope that they won´t be found until the baby will born.
And I hope they will be alrigh and happy. :)

Good chapter - one thing though, you switch tenses a lot, for example 'Charles tried something else.' but earlier 'is standing'. When writing a story it's best to keep the same tense, as most of what you write is in present I'm guessing that's what you're most comfortable with? If that's the case then just be careful of the occasional change to the past.

I do like the way you make the characters so real and emotive though, it's so easy for the reader to feel for them and empathise, and I feel so sorry for Charles with the current abuse he's putting up with, lol. I look forward to more.