rate_review Reviews

It's SO great to see an author of your caliber write some delicious new man-whipping for us bdsm-starved Yaoi fans! This is a fabulous story that you've started to develop, and I really hope that you continue it!!! I really like the plot development so far, a family in peril, three gatekeepers, and a deliciously dominant captor and his brand new, gloriously innocent slave! The whipping was PERFECT, but hopefully the punishments in the future will be....more enjoyable for both participants *grins* I forsee some mansex and spanking in the future and I'm DELIGHTED about it! Thanks for writing! I will ALWAYS back you to the very end! This genre is in dire need of people with your talent, Lucious King. I give you a big warm welcome! *snugs*

This is great! Please don't keep up waiting too long.

I'm intrigued so far. I think you should write more; it's interesting even though this first part was quite short.

I will not review... just because you threaten me, yeah better get your whip LOL G

you've caught my interest-I'd like to see where this goes

Hi!
Oh, I really liked this first chapter... I'm a bit sad about the A/N, though... If you have a story to tell, please do, and screw the reviews... yeah, I know reviews is GREAT, but the story should come first... and then if people take the time to rev' that's a plus!... and I kinde hope they do, because of thet "threat"... ;o)
All the best!
/Wynja

Please continue and update regularly. I really like your story it is very well written. I am already in love with Aravath and Edwyn but was wondering if you will be giving us some background information on them. Also, Kayton seems like an interesting but somewhat spooky character lurking in the shadows to do Aravath's bidding. Poor Edwyn! Update next chapter soon. I will be checking back constantly to find out what happens next. Great work just be sure to keep it up.

not what i expected and i was wonderfully surprised. you got right into the story and im hooked. cant wait for more~

Very good prologue. This kind of has a fantasy edge to it and I like it. *sucker for fantasy* Both characters humor me in different ways and I hope to see more of them as the story progresses. Since this is the beginning, I don't know much to say, but it looks promising.

For just one prologue, you got 8, no, 9 reviews and most of them pretty are pretty good feedback, so that I believe you have your fuel. *wink*

Well fist, know that I didn't review only because you asked but also to tell you that I LOVED it!!!

Anyways, I wonder if he's lying when he says that he's not a gatekeeper?? I hope nothing happens to his family! >< Hummmm And there's already denial on the king's part!? w00t lol :D

I really do love the story so far!~ It's Really good! *hugs X3* I can't wait to see who will crumble fist! ^__^ hihi

Thanks for the story! XDD