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Fortunately, I read the entire first chapter before writing this. The first half of it almost turned me off the story, I gotta say. I understand what you were trying to do now, but before I had read the more descriptive second half, it seemed like...not very good writing. It is though! I think a note about the style at the beginning of that chapter will keep your readers interested, because I nearly didn't stick with this long enough to get to the good part.

Anyway, I'm intrigued about the characters (memory loss is cool!) and definitely looking forward to reading the next chapter. Which I think is up right now, so I will as soon as I finish writing this. Right...about...now.

Cool so far, I look forward to seeing where you take this. I was very confused when Jealyn couldn't remember Coven.. :P

This is a really interesting start. That memory problem reminds me of 50 First Dates. Only way better. I'm a bit surprised at the kiss; didn't think he was so forward. Must see more so I'll definitely wait for updates.