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August 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, what an intense start! I hope you continue it soon. It's very interesting, I can't wait to see what happens next!
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August 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
if this is a re-edit, you might want to check sentences like this "Gregory, like the rest of the Neo-Bolsheviks wear uniforms, which are designed after the Nazi Oberfchatfuhrer uniforms from WWII, With minor changes..." and not only for spelling.
I think you can do better since your Sanchez is far from a collection of clichées. C'mon, care a little for your villain ;) I wonder why you decided to give away such details on the first page? I'm a patient reader who wouldn't mind to learn more about Gregory as things move along.
Looking forward to read more.
I think you can do better since your Sanchez is far from a collection of clichées. C'mon, care a little for your villain ;) I wonder why you decided to give away such details on the first page? I'm a patient reader who wouldn't mind to learn more about Gregory as things move along.
Looking forward to read more.