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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story caught my eye. I love your writing style. It sounds interesting. I wonder why Ayaki seems so tence. Please keep writing, as I am curious to find out what happens. By the way, is the dance game they are playing DDR or ITG? It probabaly has no relevence to the story, but I am curious to know, as I play as well.
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love your work. This is really great, I can't wait to see what happens. One little note though,
""I looked past him to the young woman next to her and offered my hand. “Pleased to meet you.”"" I think you meant to put young woman next to 'him', not her.
Other then that, that is the only mistake I saw. ^_^ Please update soon. <3
""I looked past him to the young woman next to her and offered my hand. “Pleased to meet you.”"" I think you meant to put young woman next to 'him', not her.
Other then that, that is the only mistake I saw. ^_^ Please update soon. <3