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That was really good. The ending was a little rushed though perhaps the ending could of been two chapters long. The beginning dragged a quick middle then the end but other then that quiet good.

I haven't had the chance to read all of it yet, but what I have is good. It's just my personal opinion, but I wish the scenes were fleshed out with a bit more detail, a bit more flavour text. Still, I can understand that putting a concept down on paper is different than holding it in your head, and I'm sure you didn't want to sit down and spend pages and pages on every detail of your universe (although I hope more gets explored in later chapters, because this is interesting!). You and your friend deserve majour kudos for actually finishing this as well, and I wonder if you plan to write other things set in the same frame? I'll post again when I've read the rest. Thanks for writing, and keep it up!

I just read your update and it was very good. I love how you went back and broke down all the chapters...It does flow better now. Great job. You have a brilliant imagination and it shows in this story. Please dont' give up on it. Continue it and see it through, I'd like to see how you end it. Again Great Job and update as soon a you can. :)

Great update...I never expected you to update so soon. WOW. Please continue...I'm really enjoying this story. I read your others and they are really good as well. I can not wait until your next update... Maddison and Marcus are incredible characters. I love how the ghost is playing with both of them. It will be awesome to find out who she is and what connection she has to both of them. And Michael...it's nothing like a hot werewolf to follow you around and protect you. I hope he is the one she can trust and confide in about her connection to Marcus. Please update soon.

How beautiful...He loves her and she loves him. This chapter made my heart flutter for them. Great updated. I can't wait to see what you have in store for them in the next chapter. Michael is going to be pissed when he finds out what's going on. Kudos on a great chapter.

This is an amazing, well developed story and it is worth continuing. please update soon. I can't wait to see what you have in store for Maddison and Marcus.

absolutly LOVE this story, your whole concept is great. The only critique i have is that maybe you could go into more detail about the actual roles of the characters, like what exactly does a watcher do? What are the limits of the characters powers? I mean its obvious that vampires cant go out in the day, but, as i was always told, u can not assume the reader knows what you do. Also, at times i kind've wish maddison was a little stronger, but at the same time, why isnt she, what factors limit her? Thats all the imput i have and keep up with it, it really is an amazing story and not many people can undertake the task of writing. Definatly in my top 5!

Great so far