rate_review Reviews

This really is an amazing story, problem is I don't know who to root for, lol, I do feel sorry for Connor but I kind of feel for Li too seeing as he obviously believes he's doing nothing wrong, I can't wait to read more!

i like this story!
i can't wait to read more, so update soon!!!

No! I love it! It didn't kill my interest at all. More please!

get back here and post another chapter.

Woooooooooooooooooow! And nope,you DIDN'T kill my interest in the fic. You just intrigued my interest even more. Update soon :)

Awesome, keep up the good work!

ok since this li character sounds a bit like a controll freak, so you should develop on that, like now that he knows that conner wants to run away from him he would do something like put a chain on his leg so he can only go so far...or something along those lines, cause Li sounds a bit crazy
it;s okay but not as intereting as you could make it... like put weird things in it that keep people wanting to read...for example li could have a collection of photographs with parts of them cut out...like an ex's head or something, just a lil something extra that gives the story a bit of mystery that keeps people interested

or maybe conner isnt allowed to enter certain rooms... i'de kinda run with the fact that Li took a picture of him naked and twist it around someway to show his obsession


anyway hope to see more soon, also hope ou dont get offended by my advice and ideas (if you dont want me to put any input in just tell me to but out and i will)

shadow

on the contrary, i'm more interested in ever!! this is fantastic!! i love it! please continue. :D

the car crash is alot better

its a good beginning, except you could put a bit more detail into the car crash, cause that sounds kinda boring and if your in a car crash its just bit more interesting then the car flipping, the beginning could do with a bit of work too


but other then that its interesting and would like to see more