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October 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O_O Jo..Jonas? Noo! Poor thing! Li you bastard >_< And I had almost gotten over the dead lovers and stuff! Which by the way is a very bad idea in itself, Li likes flowers. And.. uhm.. Butterflies! And cuddly bunnies and kittens! Not killing and raping and stuff >_< he just.. needs a hug.
Keep up the good work! This made my day!
Keep up the good work! This made my day!
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October 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i liked that chapter ur best so far
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October 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please Continue!
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm liking it very much! Please continue to update!
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story, and now I'm chewing on my nails wondering what's in that damn room O_o,
I keep seeing pictures of Li's dead lovers in tubes or something >_<;;; Scary guy that one.
Update soon!
I keep seeing pictures of Li's dead lovers in tubes or something >_<;;; Scary guy that one.
Update soon!
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i keep cracking up at how this is like a homo-erotic spin-off of misery by stephen king. it's fabulous!
li is scary as hell, i like how you portrayed him as having the means to inflict violence and be out of control w/ his emotions but then also showed how deranged he was in thinking this was love and he was doing nothing wrong. poor conner!!
i'm wondering if jonas is going to make an appearance now that conner has been thinking of him? it's too bad they didn't exchange numbers or something after meeting, so that jonas could somehow come to his rescue. ;) jonas or not, an interesting twist would be for someone to intrude upon their house- maybe a police officer who discovered the car, kind of like in misery. that could have potential for some good suspense and maybe an action or murder scene. ;) just an idea!!
keep up the good work!
li is scary as hell, i like how you portrayed him as having the means to inflict violence and be out of control w/ his emotions but then also showed how deranged he was in thinking this was love and he was doing nothing wrong. poor conner!!
i'm wondering if jonas is going to make an appearance now that conner has been thinking of him? it's too bad they didn't exchange numbers or something after meeting, so that jonas could somehow come to his rescue. ;) jonas or not, an interesting twist would be for someone to intrude upon their house- maybe a police officer who discovered the car, kind of like in misery. that could have potential for some good suspense and maybe an action or murder scene. ;) just an idea!!
keep up the good work!
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful! Please keep going?
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh man! I want more!! >_<
I wonder what our dear Li's got hidden inside that pretty chamber of his??...I have shills now >> brrr
I really can't wait to know what the hell's up with Li!...and to know what he is!
*sights* Poor Corner!;; he must be freaking out of his mind by now! I know I would be! O__o
Somebody help him! (just not now! lol ^^)
Thanks for the update~
And update again soon! *hugs*
I wonder what our dear Li's got hidden inside that pretty chamber of his??...I have shills now >> brrr
I really can't wait to know what the hell's up with Li!...and to know what he is!
*sights* Poor Corner!;; he must be freaking out of his mind by now! I know I would be! O__o
Somebody help him! (just not now! lol ^^)
Thanks for the update~
And update again soon! *hugs*
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October 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
sorry just very good at guessing... my best friend hates it when we go to movies and i sit there and guess the whole thing before it ends.
I think I'de like it a bit more if you put a bit more fear into conner
like in the beginning he's just been cause and Li put his hand down his pants... conner should feel like he cant breathe or struggle harder... just think if you were in this situation i bet the only words going through my head is "holey fuck he's going to rape me!" and it'd be a bit more then a struggle it'd be a gut gripping fear that makes your whole body shake
If he's going to "He watched silently as Li took off his clothes and discarded them carelessly on the floor." you better tell how he detatched himself from himself because he was so afraid... no one thats captive and about to be raped would just sit there unless they're in shock. you gotta make conner do things so its a bit more exciting for the reader like when he circles him make conner either try to bite him, scream at him or want to piss his pants cause he's so terrified.
i do love the way Li thinks its twisted and different and catches my attention *gives cheese*
the last part was good and i hope to see more soon... anyway my email is up there if you want to discuss ideas or something
as always if you want me to butt out just say so :)
I think I'de like it a bit more if you put a bit more fear into conner
like in the beginning he's just been cause and Li put his hand down his pants... conner should feel like he cant breathe or struggle harder... just think if you were in this situation i bet the only words going through my head is "holey fuck he's going to rape me!" and it'd be a bit more then a struggle it'd be a gut gripping fear that makes your whole body shake
If he's going to "He watched silently as Li took off his clothes and discarded them carelessly on the floor." you better tell how he detatched himself from himself because he was so afraid... no one thats captive and about to be raped would just sit there unless they're in shock. you gotta make conner do things so its a bit more exciting for the reader like when he circles him make conner either try to bite him, scream at him or want to piss his pants cause he's so terrified.
i do love the way Li thinks its twisted and different and catches my attention *gives cheese*
the last part was good and i hope to see more soon... anyway my email is up there if you want to discuss ideas or something
as always if you want me to butt out just say so :)
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October 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's got my interested peaked. The only problem is -- there isn't more. Please next chapter.