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August 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
ahh! update update! i think her dad did something to brian. i kinda like the idea of posting shorter chapters but faster. can u email when u do? multicoloredlite@gmail if you do. thanks.
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August 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey ali,
I've been noticing grammar mistakes and I don't usually mention it unless it is constantly made. For example in this sentence, ""Brian didn't have to tell me." he said evasively." You could put a comma after me or capitalize he.
What?! Girls don't have blue balls, haha. I thought this chapter was funny. Us females are something I tell ya. Sometimes I even annoy myself. Thanks for updating.
I've been noticing grammar mistakes and I don't usually mention it unless it is constantly made. For example in this sentence, ""Brian didn't have to tell me." he said evasively." You could put a comma after me or capitalize he.
What?! Girls don't have blue balls, haha. I thought this chapter was funny. Us females are something I tell ya. Sometimes I even annoy myself. Thanks for updating.
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August 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 23, I'm glad Josie told Mike what was going on. Jackie is crazy and Lisa is so childish. I found it funny when Josie said girls tend to stick together yet they aren't sticking with her. I hope Josie passed her GED test. Thanks for updating.
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
In chapter 21, suddenly Brian "mister tell it like it is" is suddenly being evasive about his feelings for Josie. Well, that's what he gets for liking a sixteen year old. Pervert, I'm kidding not really anyways wouldn't making out lead to that conclusion or am I not with my generation when it comes to dating and stuff. You are cool for mentioning the Deftones. Thanks for updating.
I'm sorry to hear about your sister's miscarriage. Thanks for informing us and take your time. Family is definitely first.
I'm sorry to hear about your sister's miscarriage. Thanks for informing us and take your time. Family is definitely first.
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August 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That is very sad, I'm sorry to hear that. I will pray for your family.
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just read all 21 chapters straight. I love it. I like the Time out, Tim in thing. I love the back and forth. I love the way Mr. K is not as bead as I first though he was going to be. I was a little worried when I found out Brian is 21 but It is fiction and I can suspend that in my head. Really it is just a great story. I'm sure that now that I'm caught up the short chapeters will drive4 me made because I get so wrapped up in the story, but short is better than none. Please update sone, because now I have to know how long it takes her to get it, if they pass the GED and what happend when they get out of Job Corps! Please update soon!
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Possible title: The Asshole and the Virgin?
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July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I command you to write more and write it now!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol, great chapters hun, just the usual problem of there not bing enough of them lol update soon plz hun xxx
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July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapter 16-20, I just find Brian such a romantic with this quote, "Don't worry, I won't drop you, and even if I did it isn't that far to the ground", haha. Haha, I like how you put her essay in the story. Josie being naive on things makes her cute. Thanks for updating.
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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
still here, still intrigued, still wanting you to update soon please!!!! lol