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October 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just read your blog and I had to rewrite my review. I'm sorry if my questions irk you or whatever. I'm just trying to understand Omi's character and every character in the story. To me everything written about the character whether it's trivial or not helps me understand the character. I get the point that Omi's occupation isn't important in the story but in that particular chapter it was brought up. I also understand that James didn't know Jennifer was pregnant but I had to wonder. You're the author so write what you feel is best for your character. Thanks for responding and taking the time to type it.
In chapter 7, I think maybe Omi feels something for Jennifer. Thanks for updating.
In chapter 7, I think maybe Omi feels something for Jennifer. Thanks for updating.
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October 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I think things just got a lot more complicated with this chapter... Omi possibly in love with Jenny, Rebecca in love with James, James looking for Rebecca and Jenny trying to live her life. What an emotional maze!I do have a lot more questions now than before... how do you manage that, each time? LOL
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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awww! A baby boy! How wonderful!
I do hope James finds Jenny and their son very, very soon before things start getting too complicated... I got a feeling that Omi recognized somehow James' name when he heard it. Is there anything we should know about this? (hint)... I could be mistaken though.
Is there going to be a love triangle or unrequited love? So many questions...
I do hope James finds Jenny and their son very, very soon before things start getting too complicated... I got a feeling that Omi recognized somehow James' name when he heard it. Is there anything we should know about this? (hint)... I could be mistaken though.
Is there going to be a love triangle or unrequited love? So many questions...
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey SF Omicorn, I have to confess I am not a writer I just review although I have an account on here.
In chapter 4, it deals with a lot of ethical dilemma I think. I finally agree with Jennifer about Erica's situation and her choice to leave. You know what I've heard if a person gets into a sex business it is usually hard to get out that's why I think it is better if Erica sees other options in life. I guess it all works out for James. He can start over and go find Jennifer when he does get out of jail. It's nice to have a character like Mitch to lighten the mood of the story. I'll go and check out your blog after I review. Thanks.
In chapter 4, it deals with a lot of ethical dilemma I think. I finally agree with Jennifer about Erica's situation and her choice to leave. You know what I've heard if a person gets into a sex business it is usually hard to get out that's why I think it is better if Erica sees other options in life. I guess it all works out for James. He can start over and go find Jennifer when he does get out of jail. It's nice to have a character like Mitch to lighten the mood of the story. I'll go and check out your blog after I review. Thanks.
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5, nice a cliff hanger. I've noticed that you don't delve deep into the emotion or situation of your characters for long and when you do it is to defend that character's action or choice. There's action I'll give you that, haha. And the interesting part of your story is that I don't know where you are going to take it. Thanks for updating.
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6, I hope James find out where Jennifer is soon. Doesn't James know his math and it sounds as if he doesn't really know Jennifer as well as he thought. If Omi was such a good guy he should help Jennifer find James. SF Omicron separate yourself from this Omi character because your making his character too grandiose. Thanks for updating.
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September 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter! Naming a dog after my first name, Athena, had me lauhing really hard... of course you didn't know, but still the coincidence was amusing to me...
Jenny and Erica's father is the worst father AND robber I've ever seen! Talk about a man being totally worthless!
You definitely have to continue now... I need to know if James and Jenny are going to see each other... and the baby...
Jenny and Erica's father is the worst father AND robber I've ever seen! Talk about a man being totally worthless!
You definitely have to continue now... I need to know if James and Jenny are going to see each other... and the baby...
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September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Omi is way too good! *girlie moment*
I was so glad to see James eager to search for and go back to Jennifer. I cannot decide if her decision is for the best, but I have to agree that it IS in her and Erica'a best interest right now!!!
... and, I'll say it again... Omi is too good! :)
I was so glad to see James eager to search for and go back to Jennifer. I cannot decide if her decision is for the best, but I have to agree that it IS in her and Erica'a best interest right now!!!
... and, I'll say it again... Omi is too good! :)
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September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story just keeps getting better and better!
I really don't mind the self insertion... I am shamelessly admitting I find Mr. Cronus sexy AND kinky!
I still cannot understand Erica's decision... I understand how she feels about Omi and Jennifer and wanting to somehow repay them, but I cannot understand how she thinks she can feel right and clean again by being a prostitute... I guess I can be a dimwit at times...
I hope things lighten up for James and he gets to publish his work! I was smiling at his comment to Jennifer about the other inmates thinking of him as a rough person. He's such a sweet and tormented man.
So, the key to the whole story right now is Erica and her decision and Mr. Cronus' actions after that decision is made?
I want to know more about James... when he gets released, will he go look for Jennifer, etc...
I really don't mind the self insertion... I am shamelessly admitting I find Mr. Cronus sexy AND kinky!
I still cannot understand Erica's decision... I understand how she feels about Omi and Jennifer and wanting to somehow repay them, but I cannot understand how she thinks she can feel right and clean again by being a prostitute... I guess I can be a dimwit at times...
I hope things lighten up for James and he gets to publish his work! I was smiling at his comment to Jennifer about the other inmates thinking of him as a rough person. He's such a sweet and tormented man.
So, the key to the whole story right now is Erica and her decision and Mr. Cronus' actions after that decision is made?
I want to know more about James... when he gets released, will he go look for Jennifer, etc...
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August 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi SFC Omicron,
You're welcome and thanks for actually commenting back. It's a common mistake to get the names mix up. I have a question, do you not want anonymous reviews?
In chapter 3, I don't know if the girls should trust Mr. Cronus "The Master". I think he is a pimp or something shady like that. If I heard anyone introduce themselves as "The Master" of some underground circles I would run, haha. Poor James. He doesn't deserve jail time for defending himself in my opinion, but I'm glad he's only getting six months. Thanks for updating.
You're welcome and thanks for actually commenting back. It's a common mistake to get the names mix up. I have a question, do you not want anonymous reviews?
In chapter 3, I don't know if the girls should trust Mr. Cronus "The Master". I think he is a pimp or something shady like that. If I heard anyone introduce themselves as "The Master" of some underground circles I would run, haha. Poor James. He doesn't deserve jail time for defending himself in my opinion, but I'm glad he's only getting six months. Thanks for updating.