rate_review Reviews

wow cant wait for the second chapter it makes me want to read more, but instead of calling it chapter 1 call it prologue ^-^

I got curious to check because of the low rating. The problem here is that it's soooo short, I think you should try to write a longer chapter and then post it again, it could have potential! But it is really difficult to say much of anything when there isn't much to read and also somewhat disappointing/annoying to those looking for something to read; one click and less than a minute and you've read it.

Okay, so don't give up on this, just; longer chapters, okay? :)
and also, use some spaces between the text if you make it longer...