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February 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like the new chapter to this story. I am glad that Envi has met Cass and that they will be friends. Maybe she can help him out at school too. I love the ending with the two boys snuggling in bed. So romantic. I really want to read some more of this story.
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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am glad to see that you have updated this story. I will have to go back to the beginning to catch up. Thanks for the new chapter.
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March 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. I really like the characters. I would love to see an update to it. It might flow faster if you focus on the interaction between two main characters for a while before introducing more backstory.
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March 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think this story is very interesting so far. I for one am looking forward to them going to bed and maybe feeling some sexual tension/awareness. Sorry i have a one track mind. LOL
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February 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love ths story. The plot is very interesting. I imagine Envi has some kind of special powers. Hot couple.
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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love your story. Please continue to update it, It feels like the beginning of a huge adventure. Lots of mystery and intrigue. I love the relationship between Brett and Envi. I can see that Brett is going to be a very gentle and loving seme. My favorite kind. Looking forward to the first kiss and love scene. Keep up the good work.
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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Change your summary. There is no need to advertise that you think you are not good at summaries. It's one of the most popular don'ts of writing a summary.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww! Please continue! This is wonderful! You could really take it somewhere.
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August 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You did a lot better with this chapter :) It was easy to read and gave more information of the characters, I spotted few mistakes in spelling but I make those too so it's fine really.
Anyway, I'm curious of what happened to the boy; a test subject? Beaten and raped? Just what kind of test are they running there?
Anyway, I'm curious of what happened to the boy; a test subject? Beaten and raped? Just what kind of test are they running there?
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's an interesting plot so far, although a little short.
One thing I wanted to point out is that when you dial 911, you don't ever hang up the phone until the ambulance gets there haha
He wouldn't have hung up, they wouldn't have let him.
But other than that it's definitely interesting and I am hoping to read the next chapter soon!
One thing I wanted to point out is that when you dial 911, you don't ever hang up the phone until the ambulance gets there haha
He wouldn't have hung up, they wouldn't have let him.
But other than that it's definitely interesting and I am hoping to read the next chapter soon!