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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
Ah, you're as bad as me...I hate thinking up titles too...But I'll give it a try for you..even if you dismiss them, at least it might help your own creative juices to think up one!
1) Unholy Desire
2) Into A World Darkly
3) Struggle With The Devil
4) Kaleidoscope Of The Mind
There you go...Not much help I expect..but even if they give you a spark of an ideal, then I'll feel happy..lol..
Ah, you're as bad as me...I hate thinking up titles too...But I'll give it a try for you..even if you dismiss them, at least it might help your own creative juices to think up one!
1) Unholy Desire
2) Into A World Darkly
3) Struggle With The Devil
4) Kaleidoscope Of The Mind
There you go...Not much help I expect..but even if they give you a spark of an ideal, then I'll feel happy..lol..
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January 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
How mean was that of Mr Gordon? To make the two boys feel guilty for something they hadn't (yet?) done....
And who is this mysterious Angie? And who is her gay dad...not Mr Gordon himself by any chance is it?..lol
You know, you spoil your readers too much...maybe, if you want more reviews per chapter, you should leave it a week between postings....Not that I'm complaining about your quick updates...oh no, not at all..lol..I love it whenever I see any of the stories I'm following updated...It was just a little tip for you, is all...
How mean was that of Mr Gordon? To make the two boys feel guilty for something they hadn't (yet?) done....
And who is this mysterious Angie? And who is her gay dad...not Mr Gordon himself by any chance is it?..lol
You know, you spoil your readers too much...maybe, if you want more reviews per chapter, you should leave it a week between postings....Not that I'm complaining about your quick updates...oh no, not at all..lol..I love it whenever I see any of the stories I'm following updated...It was just a little tip for you, is all...
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Flower,
Fan-fucking-tastic story!!! Love the characters, Luke & Alex- so yinyang!!! It is not often that stories that have a decent, not sickenly sweet, plotline...it's refreshing. So yeah, can't wait for the update. Hey if you want, read my story... TORIN & SAMAYEL, it maybe to your liking.
'til then
Asyen
Fan-fucking-tastic story!!! Love the characters, Luke & Alex- so yinyang!!! It is not often that stories that have a decent, not sickenly sweet, plotline...it's refreshing. So yeah, can't wait for the update. Hey if you want, read my story... TORIN & SAMAYEL, it maybe to your liking.
'til then
Asyen
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January 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
I'm not sure if Alex's kiss was cruel or kind...I mean, I know his intentions were good, but surely...I don't know...surely it would have been better just to have stood up and defended poor Lukas against the bullies, without tormenting him by kissing him, even going so far as to deepen the kiss by using his tongue, something I didn't think he'd do, if he were really 'straight'...
And Lukas is right, Alex hasn't really defused the situation...rather, he's just changed the target for the bullies...and that's supposed to make Lukas feel better?..lol..
I can see why you like this chapter...it certainly makes the reader go through several emotive changes..anger at the bullies..awed wonder at the kiss..relief at knowing Alex is alright..worry, because you know it isn't going to end there...lol..
Very good, I enjoyed it...
I'm not sure if Alex's kiss was cruel or kind...I mean, I know his intentions were good, but surely...I don't know...surely it would have been better just to have stood up and defended poor Lukas against the bullies, without tormenting him by kissing him, even going so far as to deepen the kiss by using his tongue, something I didn't think he'd do, if he were really 'straight'...
And Lukas is right, Alex hasn't really defused the situation...rather, he's just changed the target for the bullies...and that's supposed to make Lukas feel better?..lol..
I can see why you like this chapter...it certainly makes the reader go through several emotive changes..anger at the bullies..awed wonder at the kiss..relief at knowing Alex is alright..worry, because you know it isn't going to end there...lol..
Very good, I enjoyed it...
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January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
Phew...(wipes brow..) For a minute there, you had me worried...I thought I was reading one of those damn annoying little notes from the author that said the story was abruptely ending there...Soooooooo glad to see you're not like that...and that we will get to read the rest of the story....and look forward to another one too! Excellent!!!
Phew...(wipes brow..) For a minute there, you had me worried...I thought I was reading one of those damn annoying little notes from the author that said the story was abruptely ending there...Soooooooo glad to see you're not like that...and that we will get to read the rest of the story....and look forward to another one too! Excellent!!!
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
That was really brave of Lukas to trust Alex like that, letting himself be swayed into going to breakfast, when he knew it was the worse thing he could do...but at least Alex stayed true to his word, and did defend poor Lukas...although it took him quite some time to find him when he ran off!
So, Alex has revealed some of his past...and very sad and sorry it is too! And by the sound of the teaser for the next chapter, it looks like he pays a price for being friendly towards Lukas!!!!
That was really brave of Lukas to trust Alex like that, letting himself be swayed into going to breakfast, when he knew it was the worse thing he could do...but at least Alex stayed true to his word, and did defend poor Lukas...although it took him quite some time to find him when he ran off!
So, Alex has revealed some of his past...and very sad and sorry it is too! And by the sound of the teaser for the next chapter, it looks like he pays a price for being friendly towards Lukas!!!!
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AWWWWW!!!!
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Really cute... keep going... it should get a lot better!!!
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts
I really like this!
I wonder how Alex will treat Lukas once the others spitefully tell him that his room-mate's gay. I'm hoping that he's better than all the rest, and that he'll protect Luke, rather than turn on him and beat him like the cowardly others did...
I really like this!
I wonder how Alex will treat Lukas once the others spitefully tell him that his room-mate's gay. I'm hoping that he's better than all the rest, and that he'll protect Luke, rather than turn on him and beat him like the cowardly others did...
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January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like your story. Your character development is pretty good so far and I like how you space your paragraphs making your story easy to read.
I can't wait to see how Lukas and Alex get along once Alex finds out about Lukas's past.
Write more soon.
Just one quick thing though you said in the first chapter "The man had tortured him for three days, a time in which he mutilated parts of his body, even going as far as castrating him." If the man castrated him how could he get an erection like you wrote about in chapter 2(First Impressions)?
I eagerly await your next chapter
BCM
I can't wait to see how Lukas and Alex get along once Alex finds out about Lukas's past.
Write more soon.
Just one quick thing though you said in the first chapter "The man had tortured him for three days, a time in which he mutilated parts of his body, even going as far as castrating him." If the man castrated him how could he get an erection like you wrote about in chapter 2(First Impressions)?
I eagerly await your next chapter
BCM