rate_review Reviews

I want a second season. I really liked the first. I have to say that i randomly happened across your story but I'm glad I tried it out. because there are somany characters there is a huge potential for confusion so I generally don't read stories like this. Of course with yours I managed to keep them all straight. I think my favorite story line is brian/liam, theresa/david, and david/carl

a sugession: don't have fagments like: Amanda is puerto rican. She is 18 years old. She sat up in bed. maybe have them all blend together: Eighteen year old puerto rican named Amanda, sat up in bed questioning to herself, "what the fuck..."
its not good but an improvement