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for Affection

by Isakuu

schedule April 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
muy buen comienzo y espero muy pronto el desenlace, ana maria
schedule March 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
espero con ansiedad los capitulos por venir como ofreciste, ana maria
person Louk
schedule November 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon, please?
schedule January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's a pretty good start, and a great premise for a romance.

You have a great set up going on, though I noticed a few spelling mistakes and a bit of a problem with paragraphing.

Other than that, however, I think you have the potential for a good story here. Keep up the good work!
person Ker
schedule January 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good start! Please keep going!
person Anon
schedule December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so far! I can't wait to read more! ;)
person Lee
schedule December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great start! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
person Mamandada
schedule December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ha. That car ride reminds me of one I recently had. But minus the budding love and angry married man.

Anyway, I think that the chapter was about the right length. Long enough to merit reading, but short enough to not get bored.

Large arguement sounds weird together. I think huge would have been a better adj. I mean, large would work, it just... sounds kinda weird. Other than that, doesn't sound bad.