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its a good story but the whole vampire and werewolf thing is so over played, its not funny. i think your stories would be much better if they were about fictional characters, and their life. the reason is becasue it sounds like you took ideas from other writers and you just put in acouple of your own words in, to make it sound different.

Keep up the good work, but you have to fix the grammar a little more and fix up some of the spelling. Other than that it's really good

I agree with the others I mean it’s a good story, you just need to go in more detail about the events happening in the story. Also you need to proof read and look for spelling mistakes, and grammatical errors. This is constructive criticism we are giving you, and please update soon!

Totally agree with above youve got a v complex situation in the story yet your rushing through it to fast, missing out the little clues that allow a reader to form opinions, right or wrong, on any charactors with the possible exception of the main two.

However, looks like what will turn out to be a great plot. Good work tbh. GL and update soon!

I like it so far, though the chapters need to be longer. Because it's a good story, even though you have counting mine 2 reviews for this story, please don't abandon it, please update soon :).

Hello! For a first try it's a very good fic. I think you just, (in my opinion) may want to work with the chapter length and slowing the pace down a touch. Your story sounds as if you're very rushed to let everyone know what happens next. You're moving them a little too fast to actually let a reader grasp your characters and their relationship with one another. I think if you slow it down and take your time to relay everything, you'll be doing much better. :-) I hope my review proves helpful. :)