rate_review Reviews

I agree with Jace. The story is very interesting and has good potential. The problem is, its riddled with errors that could be easily prevented with a beta. For instance, you misspelled \"pale\" as \"pail\" a couple times, and \"scares\" should have been \"scars\". And it seems there was also a bit of a problem with commas. But if you clear all that up, I\'m sure it would be great ^_^

~C~

The story seems pretty good so far but I highly suggest getting yourself a Beta reader to read over your materiual before you post it.