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schedule January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really like the beginning and idea for this story..and am anxious to see where u go with it
schedule January 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Five parts huh? SHould be interesting to follow. Not a bad start either, although you should put a space inbetween when they talk. It breaks it up so it is easier to read.

Adrina said this
her sister said

but make it..

Adrina said this

Her sister said


I'll be reading.


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