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oh man ,that was hot.i do feel sorry that i didn't read till today ,so very good.more, need more.

Read your message on my reviews section just now. Glad to hear from you. I think that, acording to the AFF message on the main page, that everything from 12/01-12/06 is lost forever *cries* Reviews and fic chapters. I'm just glad that they fixed it. I logged on last night and couldn't figure out what was going on! I just hope it doesn't happen again any time soon *crosses fingers* Now, I'm off to repost ... ^_^

I'm so sorry you lost so many reviews! That sucks. I love my reviews, and if I lost over ten of them, I'd be pulling my hair out. And it also sucks that you lost all your corrections. I was just grateful that the chapter I needed to re-post didn't use a lot of HTML. That would be a real hassle to redo.

Anyway, on to more cheerful subjects. I loved the new chapters! There were so many favorite moments. The ice cream kiss, all sugary and strawberry-flavored was absolutely wonderful. And the snippet of dialogue between the little girl and her horrified mother totally cracked me up. I also adored it when Ashi told Garnen that his cooking was almost as good as chocolate. Knowing how much he loves chocolate, that was pretty high praise, and also seemed perfect for his character. Oh, and also Garnen pretending to be Ashi's fiancee in order to get Tony to pay up, and Ashi taking advantage of that -- another scene of pure comic genius. (Nice to see Tony get what he has coming to him.) Yeah, I could go on forever...

I did have one question. You sometimes use Spanish (which I like) and mention going over the border into Mexico. Do you have a particular setting in mind? I'm just curious, because I live in Texas, so if your story was set here, that would be extra cool.

I hope you get your corrections re-done for chapters 13 and 14 and post them again soon!

Love,
Falcon

I think something has gone horribly wrong at AFF. When I looked at "White Rabbit" this morning, I thought you had 14 chapters posted? Anyway, I re-posted the new chapter of Jelly Babies. Hope it actually stays this time!

And now I'll read the new bits of "White Rabbit". Even if there aren't quite as many as I remember...

Love,
Falcon

I liked this chapter a lot! Garnen's getting so protective of his little bunny, and I love it. You know I'm a sucker for that sort of thing. Although you're such a tease ... only one kiss this chapter (an we're already at chapter 12)! You're doing great though, and I can't wait for your next update.

Oh, and I'm not sure about everybody else, but I read your responses to the reviews. (As a matter of fact, I might start doing it myself with my own fics.) I suck at fixing mistakes, that's why I'm not a beta (that, and I'm lazy) but I would like to point out that you misuse to/too sometimes. It's kind of a pet peve of mine, so I thought I'd point out that when you mean also it's *too* not *to*. Just a little fyi. Hope it helps. ^_^

Heheh... I could tell I got addicted to this story when I checked back here five or six times today thinking, "She promised she'd update..." XD I do love the character development, particularly in this chapter... though I couldn't say what it was about this chapter in particular. Hmm. Well, at risk of rambling: I think this story's going at a really good speed, but really, restraint is overrated. :3

Whoot! A second kiss. Yesssss. Hehe. I loved that. So I guess the next step must have been for them to get engaged? ;] Hahah. That was rad. So cute. Now Garnen can take care of Ashi and Ashi can get his school work done and-- oh, but that won't happen, will it? ;-; Mm, guess you'll just have to keep writing for me to find out, eh? :9

I'm glad I could help. :D Short, crappy review this time, but I loved this chapter (aww, kisses) and can't wait for the next one. The grammar and such seem to be improving, too, with each chapter, which is always nice to see. Great job as always!

I'm really sorry I haven't been reviewing. Been busier lately. Anywayyyyy, ahhh I LOVE THIS STORY. :DDDD Sooo cute! I love Ashi. He makes me smile. Garnen sometimes needs a good whack to the head. Finally he admits he wants Ashi. Haha. :] I love it. EEE, they kissed! They kissed! It was glorious. I love it, i love it, i love it. >__>;; Mooooooreeeeee. Hehe, I'll shut up now, but yeah. I love the characters, I love the setting, and I loveee you for making such a rad-ass story. <3.

Yay! Garnen finally cracked! At least a little bit... It's about damn time too. --ties Garnen and Ashi together-- It was really cute tohugh. ^_^ And I totally did not expect Garnen to initiate it! And, like Ashi said, we all know he'd do it again.

When Ashi was taking his time in line with the ice cream, I know exactly how the people feel. -_-... Especially when it's raining out and you have to eat fast to get back to work! (That was me when I interned at the local zoo last year. ^^;)

Poor Ashi... He's probably never dealt with a person like Garnen before. Or even just the associated feelings. But I'm sure everything will work out sooner or later... Or one will jump the other... Whichever happens first. ^_~ I'm kinda curious to know who would bottom in this relationship... Hm...

Anyway... Please update soon! (Yes, I like writing long reviews. ^_^;)

No, I'm not Japanese. ^_^; My whole interest in Asian stuff began waaaaay back when I started watching anime (about 7 years ago), and now it's turned into what I want to do. ^^ In high school I took Japanese (the one whole year it was offered) and my teacher was American. I promised him I'd take over when I got out of college. ^_^ I intend to keep that promise! Even if it kills me!

And now I must go to bed so I can go to my only class tomorrow (Japanese!).