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I went and ate dinner so I can't remember what I wanted to say. sorry...

Okay... I'll admit it. I'm addicted to this story. I came to AFF thinking I'd read just one more chapter and look at me I've almost read ten! (or around that) For some reason I almost cried in this chapter. Not at a sad part, when Ashi said he loved Garnen, but it was a sad feeling O.o I should have been happy it is after all what I've been waiting for.

Well, I didn't cry, I'm proud to say; but I did get that clenched, hurty thing happening high up in my throat, and that really tight feeling across my forehead and around my eyes. So, close enough. Lol. I know sad endings are difficult to commit to, and I appreciate your artistic integrity in following your vision through to the end, but I wish there 'had' been a happier ever after for these two. Poor Garnen, I can't imagine him getting past this. Ah well, it can't all be hearts and roses. Good job.

Alisha

you....you...!!! I'm in hysterics right now, totally crying my eyes out!! HOW COULD YOU!!?!?!?
Oh my god!! Poor garren!!!!! Poor Ashi!!!
WHY????
Don't you love love?
I'll admit, as an ending, it kicked emotional ass. I mean, you ripped my heart out and stomped on it. With hooker boots. My hands are shaking and I KNOW i will not be able to sleep easily tonight. I won't. Wasn't there another way to get this ending out of your system? A one shot maybe?? Ashi was such a vibrant character and to have him essentially raped to death while that no good Mirah thingi goes free PISSES THE HELL OUT OF ME. I hope Lan kills Mirah-thingi...really painfully.
And poor Garren is going to need a live in psychatrist after this! Ashi died b/c he thrashed around, wanting Garren? Hello! This is not a nice thing to do to your character! You've already stolen the love of his life away and now he's responsible for his death?? Garren has a god complex bigger then who knows what, he'll totally blame himself. His department's budget costs are not going to cover the therapy bills.
oh, the therapy..."well, after my wife was murdered because of me, I waited ten years to open up to someone...where is he? oh, we argued and he got kidnapped and raped to death."
How is he going to deal?
And why did Ashi deserve this again? That poor boy!! I can't even express how much i loved this character and he. died. on. me.
what is it with good authors and killing off their characters?
::sigh::
three last things: one, i sincerely hope you plan on doing another story in this universe/alternate earth. There is such possiblities here, it's just nuts. i'm jealous of the playground you've got avaliable with this sort of world history.
two, please have Mithri-thingi get knocked off. Seriously. Nature or not, he's a bad, bad person. I really want to rip open his throat and feed his dick to him through that new second mouth, you know? Don't like hi, the arrogant advanced monkey.
three: great story. So fabulously written adn described. Every detail was meticiously thought out and planned and I have to say, it was a joy to read (several grammatical and spelling mistakes aside).
Amazing job. thanks for the wonderful read!

"you were going over the speed limit"
hehehehe!!
that was hysterical. Did you get any inspiration from Gravitation the manga for this?

I cried soooo hard... That was sooo sad.. my god.

I'm half way through now adn I'm debating with myself:
read on and enjoy?
save it for later?
I know I should save some for another day and not finish it tonight but I can't help myself! It's so good!!

:: deep breath:: Okay. This was really hard to read, let alone edit... I found your writing so much improved. That said, OH MY GOD... Ashi's shame and the reduction of humanity in him, the pain of being reminded so viscerally of his past, his body's betrayal of him, were all so very difficult. You did an admirable job of keeping everything real, of being uncompromising about the cruelty and viciousness of his attackers. Carlos's scene shocked me, and then made perfect sense. Lan's misery till the end was heartbreaking, especially his continued submissiveness. The issues of homosexual marriage and the recognition of partner's rights in the hospital were extremely appropriate. The proposal is ...touching. All in all, this chapter was some of your best work.

How could you, I know that they are your characters but they deserved more, much more than an uneanted death in a hospital and another lover gone. You might as well have Garnen kill himself because now he has nothing to live for. And death is the easist way to end a story. I was just hoping that this story would turn out better and you let the bad guy win! Even though he died Ashi died and that was just what he wanted. They just deserved so much more than that, so much more.

I had a bad feeling that you would end it that way. Made me cry, you big meenie! However, I do understand why you did it. Sometimes the unhappy ending makes a story better. I wish it weren't so, but I understand none the less. I have one happy and one sad ending planned out for "Perceived Perceptions", and I'm still not sure which to use. Hopefully this will be reason enough for you to forgive me if I choose the sad ending? It must have taken a lot out of you to write that, so I think I'll forgive you. Just this once. Good job either way. I look forward to your next fic, even if Sci-Fi isn't my thing these days. I'm sure it'll be great anyway. ^_^