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I\'ll write a more comprehensive review when I wake up, sometime in December. :P

I really like this story. Ashi\'s a very interesting character (bunny ears! :D) the tension between the two main characters is really well done- and it\'s nice to see a relationship that has more than sex- and the plot is nice and fast. I have a short attention span, so fast is good. The only critisism I can give is minor grammar errors- putting apostriphes where they don\'t need to be (want\'s instead of wants) for the most part. That doesn\'t distract over-much from the story itself, though, so it\'s all good. ^^

Great story! I really like the two main characters. Garnen seems so real to me, especially the way he still mourns for his dead wife. The scene where he and Ashi go through her things was very touching -- this small, unspoken way that he shares a bit of his grief with Ashi. It really shows the potential of a very deep, loving relationship between these two, despite the vicious (and hilarious) bantering. I eagerly await the next chapter!

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And thanks for your lovely review of \"Candy Kisses\"! As a fellow writer, I\'m sure you know how much feedback is appreciated!

Love,
Falcon

oh please more ,please it very good and i want to see what is going to happen next?

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Love,
Falcon

Wow! Two chaps since my last visit. What a pleasant surprise. Well, the story is progressing well, your two main characters beginning to feel something for each other even though they stiill want to deny it. I\'m curious of Ashi\'s classmate too, wanting to know where and when he\'ll be someplace. Spying on his friend? For the bad guys maybe? hmmmm *strokes chin in contemplating way* Hopefully Garnen the protector will catch up to the little rabbit, because as tough as nails as Ashi is, he so vulnerable. And his self-esteem seems so low - is it because he\'s a rabbit and feels the world is against him? *huggles him again*

I like this story very much! The idea is so interesting! Please continue! I want to know what will happen! And soon. :P

Oh, this is a good one. Me likes! I hope you\'ll update soon, I can hardly wait. I love Ashis character, he so cute and strong at the same time. Keep this story going!

Was too lazy to sign in, heh. Wow great chap!! The verbal sparring was all kinds of fun but I was feeling so bad for the bunny boy at the end. Poor baby, I just know he couldn\'t stop tears from falling with those nasty words thrown at him. I just wanna give him a hug. I hope Garnen feels guilty at some point for what he said. Looking forward to the next chapter. And thank you for reviewing my GW fic *smile*

It\'s a good story so far. I like the main character. Bunny ears! :3 Kawaii. Would you care if I drew him?

Great, I love this. Please keep up with this story!