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I love it in so many ways, it\'s just lovely, please keep up the fantastic work. I loved the part in the shower, your humor is great very well kempt with each character. I also enjoy your ability to keep certain attributes of each character from slipping into another one. It\'s lovely work, as I can\'t stop saying.
Please, do keep posting and happy thanksgiving :)
Ariel Pryor

I had a feeling Tray shouldn\'t be trusted... >_>... Friends don\'t just randomly jump you and molest you. (Unless you want them too, but that\'s a whole different story.) ^_^;

The last part of the chapter is very suspicious. Hm... I had a feeling there would be some issues with Ashi getting close to Garnen.

Please update soon!

I\'m not doing any betaing at the moment since school is eating my brain (two 15 page papers due in less than a month! ;_;...).

I forgot to add this in a previous review, but thanks for reviewing \"Snowfall\"! And no, the two characters in it aren\'t Shen and Namazzi. They are just two nameless victims of my muse. ^_^

Ashi is so cute... I just can\'t get over that. ^_^ He still has some innocence, despite what his profession is. The whole doughnut scene was cute in an odd, argumentive way. ^^ Garnen is such a bastard sometimes, but I think he really does like Ashi.

I may be looking to deeply into this, but when the baker said \"I never suspected another male\", does that imply that Garnen has been with a guy before, or am I looking at this from an odd angle?

Toward the end where Ashi was teasing Garnen before they left was cute. ^^ We all know Garnen will miss the hyperactive little rabbit.

Please update soon! Oh, and a beta-reader can do a few things. Mostly they just read over a story and correct spelling/grammar mistakes, but they can also give tips on things you might want to consider. You can also bounce ideas off of them for feedback. I\'ve done betaing in the past. ^_^;

Aww. I loved the scene in the doughnut shop -- the way you described everything was wonderful, especially when Ashi thought the doughnuts were too pretty to eat. I could really imagine the pastries looking like little works of art. (As you\'ve probably guessed from my stories, I have a major sweet-tooth!) It\'s good to see Garnen slowly opening up to Ashi, but I worry that Ashi will accidentally hurt him, simply because he (Ashi) isn\'t comfortable being close to people. Despite Garnen\'s rough exterior, I know he\'s just a big softie inside! And I don\'t have any trouble with your pacing. I like stories where the couple doesn\'t hop into bed together on the first page. The slow way allows more romantic tension, and is more believable. (After all, I\'m on story 3, and Kale and Marzi STILL aren\'t a proper couple...)

Eagerly awaiting your next update!

Love,
Falcon

I loved the first line of this chapter! “Put the gun down and step away from the whore.” I\'m not entirely sure why, but it really cracked me up. Garnen makes a wonderful, if somewhat reluctant and grouchy, savior for poor Ashi. I just adore slash stories where one guy nurses another back to health. That sort of thing totally pushes my buttons. It\'s great to see their relationship keep inching, ever so slowly, toward true intimacy.

Oh happiness! You already have fourteen chapters written. I hate it when people get me hooked on their wonderful stories, and then stop writing them. It\'s very reassuring to know that I have so much more to look forward to.

Love,
Falcon

I thought that poor baby had a fever. I wonder if he\'ll have fever induced flashbacks and nightmares? Garnen still being too caustic. Hope he wises up soon. I have to agree with some of your other reviewers in regards to your use of description of the scene. It makes the scene easy to visualize in my head so I see it play out as I read along.

*Swoons* Garnen to the rescue! I\'m such a sucker for knights in shining armor protecting damsels in distress. (Okay, Garnen\'s armor is a little tarnished, and Ashi\'s one foul-mouthed damsel, but you know what I mean...) I loved the way you described the rain in this chapter -- the way it feels against Ashi\'s face, and how it interacts with the lamplight, and the way it falls like waterfalls from the gutters. Very evocative. Really pulled me into the setting. I can\'t wait to find out what happens next!

Love,
Falcon

Ahh! Cliffhanger! So evil. ^_^ I\'ve been reading this all night trying to catch up and I finally have! Very good story so far. It\'s the first I\'ve read with a bunny-boy in it. ^_^ I like the \"relationship\" Ashi and Garnen have, and I\'m hoping it will turn into something more, right? ^_~

Well, please update soon! And thanks for the review on my story (\"Surrender\")! Reviews make me happy. ^^

thank you for a truly engaging story. i\'ve read all 6 available chapters in the last 2 hours. i am extremely invested in the story. i am very curious about tray... about the professor... about the chief. the bar, the school.. i can see all your interiors very clearly, i can see garen\'s house and the police station. your writing leaves very few holes, but is not excessively wordy. thanks again. i look forward eagerly to the next installment.

Yay! New chapter! I love the way you describe your characters. \"He had angular, pointed features, a thin, but not quite scrawny figure, and light rimmed glasses, usually hanging low on his face as if he had not the time nor will to keep them in place...\" That painted such a vivid picture inside my mind. Every chapter you make me worry more and more about poor Ashi! Despite all his talk about surviving, he seems set on a course of self-destruction, ignoring the help that others might give him. I hope something happens to make him realize that he\'s so much more than \"portal trash\".

Oh, and about \"To Please The Wind\". I have many more adventures in mind for Lethe, Hesperos, and Melanthe. As soon as I finish \"Jelly Babies\" (the third and final installment in the \"Sugar Hearts\" trilogy), I\'ll get back to them. Thanks for asking!

Love,
Falcon