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for Serenity

by dark1starr

person Tiffany
schedule November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awwwww!!!! That was beautiful!!! Hehe I loved the part at the Alter. Hehe I am glad that Kristian is good again. Can\'t wait for the sequel.
person Tiffany
schedule November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You know I am glad you made Kristian with feelings. I would probably turned cold too if I thought my love and child were dead. You did a great job showing off his vulnerability.
schedule November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oops on me. Im sorry chaos lackey. I was trying to delete my review that I posted. Thanks for all the pointers though! I appreciate it. I fixed the mistakes i could find. Keep reading. I have more written so it will come soon.

Starfyre
person Anon
schedule November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\"We will now fail you.”

I\'m sure they will fail the kings, but I don\'t think you meant to type that. Hehee...

Nice story. ^-^
person Tiffany
schedule November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh!!! Love it! Hmm, need some help huh? You should include someone from this 3rd kingdom. Is her grandfather still alive? I also suggest that you show a scene with Kristian and Sarai pretty soon here.
person Tiffany
schedule November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh wow!! First off, poor Valeska! But she did an admirable job fighting back though! And I do hope that Serenity will see again. But I love it!! Hehehe what happens next?
person Tiffany
schedule November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hehe yeah naughty. But I love it just the same. Please hurry up with the next chapter!
person Ju-Chan
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Neat story. Look out for the word than though. You use than in place of then a lot. Other than that your stories are nifty.
Keep writing. ^-^
person Starfyre
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LoL, Thanks for all the reviews and to answer. I would like to think I have that certain spark. I would also like to believe That the story is on peoples favorite lists. Any writer would. I am far from Professional though.

Thanks and keep reviewing. I have many more chapters ready. I hope they live up to the readers expectations. Give me an e mail some time. I don\'t mind hearing ideas at all.

Starfyre
person ChaosLacky
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Looks great so far! Oh, and for the poll thing.

1: What chapter , that you have read and that is posted so far, do you enjoy the most?
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2: What character stands out the most as your obvious favorite in the story?
Veleska was starting to look cool, either her or the shadow guy.

3: What is YOUR opinion of what should, or could happen next?
Err....Our hero\'s get powers and fight zombies? Or maybe at least skeletons. Or a dragon could spice things up.