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potiental to be an awesome story, keep writing.

Hi! I think that this story has real potential. The plot is very interesting and the characters are well developed for only having two chapters, but I think the reason you might not have a lot of reviewers is because of your format. Try putting some spaces in instead of having the chapter a massive paragraph. It makes it very difficult to read and might discourage new readers from your story. Just a suggestion. :o) Good luck!