rate_review Reviews

I loved this story. It was simply amazing and I hope you continue writing more stories!

Ohhh, I loved this. It was great. Towards the end, I did feel a bit awkward with the Luke/Clarissa thing, especially because it seemed to make the setting that much more unreal... but seriously, I just loved reading about Melanie, Brice, and Melanie and Brice together. Love, love and so much love - maybe someone out there might call it cheesy, but I don't think so. Their affection for each other, and the way they make each other feel and they way they show their love/attraction, it's all just so beautifully written. Bravo, and thank you - I look forward to whatever else you might write in the future (and if you could drop me an email whenever that happens... that would be awesome). Rock on!

I can't believe this is the end I thought you were just getting started. To be honest I don't really care how many sex scenes a story may have just as long as the story has good character development, plot, closure, etc. I would like to say that you started out very strong then towards the end you seemed rush in ending the story. Maybe I just want to read more, haha. Unless you're making a sequel? And if you're not making a sequel then I say you made a good start for your first story and sooner or later you'll be a pro. Good luck with the next story and I look forward to reading more from you. Thank you for writing.

i really really liked this story when it first started out, although i feel as though it's lost a little bit of power near the end. but i read it all the way through, which is really rare for me because most of the stories on here are not engaging enough for me to warrant spending so much time with them. Keep up the good work, and I'd love to see the ending!

I loved it, is that the end? ~xKat

Thanks for explaining things. Okay, in chapter 18, I wanted to start out saying that I like the title of the chapter because I don't think any female should live without eyeliner and lipstick and maybe a few males too, haha. From reading this chapter I feel as if the relationship between Melanie and Brice is somewhat shallow right now. What I mean is that it isn't solid, whole or strong enough yet and they are too happy so I have a feeling you might change that. Thanks for updating.

Hey, I'm glad to have read chapters 1-17 and that you've decided to repost it. My first impression of Melanie is that she's self deprecating yet she's funny about it and honest. I like the friendship between Clarissa and Melanie. I think I relate more to Clarissa's character though I thought she changed a bit to fast especially with her swearing like a sailor, haha. I like the confident Melanie though sometime she can be a little dramatic. The only constructive criticism I can give is that there were a few grammar problems like a misspelled word or a missing word. No biggie, haha. It would be nice to have a reason to come back to this website again since a few of the authors I like aren't posting. Thanks.

Very nice. Your story has a good opening and remains strong through out the story. I'm interested in see how you play this one.

when do you plan to update this again?

I'm really enjoying the story. I'm glad that Lucas and Clarissa got together. It was obvious that it wouldn't have worked out with Melanie. Her and Brice are perfect together. Update soon