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July 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. More detail and setting the scene would improve it, however. I found myself guessing what was going on, as everything was very short and abrupt.
Also, paragraphs. You probably meant to put them in, but they aren\'t there. No real issue, it just makes it difficult to read and interferes with the flowing of the story.
Great idea, though.
Also, paragraphs. You probably meant to put them in, but they aren\'t there. No real issue, it just makes it difficult to read and interferes with the flowing of the story.
Great idea, though.