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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s sad to see this story come to a close, but at least it had a [reletively] happy ending. I know I haven\'t reviewed until now, but I\'ve been following it since it was early in development and enjoying the whole, bumpy ride. Great Job.
Now we get to see how Original Sin turns out.
Now we get to see how Original Sin turns out.
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nicely done! Congrats on another beautifully handled story - your ending was just right!
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m so sad that this story is over, but I\'m really impressed with the final chapter. It really made things fall into place, I was happy with the way it ended and you just did a fantastic job - as always :P Like I said in my last review, I could tell that this was a difficult story for you to write, but you stuck in there and I applaude you for that. Personally, this is my favourite story of yours but I\'m looking forward to new ones and reading more of the ones you have on the go at the moment. Well done!
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Perfect ending. Absolutely perfect.
../\\_/\\
.(^_^)III../\\_/\\
()().()()II.(^_^)
IIIIIIIIIIIII()()()()
../\\_/\\
.(^_^)III../\\_/\\
()().()()II.(^_^)
IIIIIIIIIIIII()()()()
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
beautifull! i mean....this story is sooo beautifull!!! the end was so great and lovely and *_*
it\'s sad though, it\'s the end ;_;
it\'s sad though, it\'s the end ;_;
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sequel!!
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October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey i read ur story thru today and all i can say is that i loved it ..its all angsty(i dont know if thats a word) but anyway.......
yeah back to the story i love it ... btu as a reviewer do u mind if i tell u i hated teh plot i hated the pain and i definitely hated the death(not cool with death and all u know) its not criticism for the story i just felt eve didnt need to die for this sory to work.. it cud \'ve bn something else not neccesarily death of like a main charcter......
Other than that i also felt that the story cudve bin begun differently ... it cudve started with a flashback straigt away instead of a present to past look they work but only when u havelike a bit of boh periodically............
I like the stories u write ur pl.lots are more or less always good and u maintain a consistency that is seriously impressive and u have grown as a writer since flame and leah which i believe was ur first stor..... my fav story of urs will have to b like a dream come tru and i have a strong fondness for Orignl sin .. il like them more and i like the story link line between them too... its good that u have a way of showing a story where u are able to relte to all the charecters and how they react to the given situation even if they are just like cameo roles.....
Ur one of the best ive ever read.............
so keep going and keep up the hardwork..
ps.dont take the criticism too badly coz i love ur work..
yeah back to the story i love it ... btu as a reviewer do u mind if i tell u i hated teh plot i hated the pain and i definitely hated the death(not cool with death and all u know) its not criticism for the story i just felt eve didnt need to die for this sory to work.. it cud \'ve bn something else not neccesarily death of like a main charcter......
Other than that i also felt that the story cudve bin begun differently ... it cudve started with a flashback straigt away instead of a present to past look they work but only when u havelike a bit of boh periodically............
I like the stories u write ur pl.lots are more or less always good and u maintain a consistency that is seriously impressive and u have grown as a writer since flame and leah which i believe was ur first stor..... my fav story of urs will have to b like a dream come tru and i have a strong fondness for Orignl sin .. il like them more and i like the story link line between them too... its good that u have a way of showing a story where u are able to relte to all the charecters and how they react to the given situation even if they are just like cameo roles.....
Ur one of the best ive ever read.............
so keep going and keep up the hardwork..
ps.dont take the criticism too badly coz i love ur work..
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October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh... That was beautiful. Simply beautiful. You really couldn\'t have ended it better, so don\'t second guess yourself. Yes, Jake does deserve some happiness, and I think you writing the ending as you did leaves it up to us to decide whether or not they make it. Which is a fantastic way of concluding a story. You\'ve really done such an amazing job with this story. And so far, like I said, it\'s my favorite. Good luck with Original Sin, and I hope to see some new stuff from you soon!
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October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alright well all bodily harm is put aside. You ended it very well. Some parts a bit repetative so I will say not your best chapter but at least you didn\'t have a bad ending. Congratulations on another story well done.
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October 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! You have to write a sequel... that was one of the best stories i have ever read and i loved it! I would love to hear about more adventures with Jake and Jo! The ending was amazing honestly.... i loved every bit of it!