rate_review Reviews

I loved what i have read so far. I can\'t wait for the next installment. The imagry and character development of Joey, as her relationship with Jake progresses and her response to the abuse, was very believable and well introduced in a timely manner. Some authors seem to want to rush to a conclusion and leave out details of emotions and feelings, but you do a good job of developing the characters and plot. I think, as a reader, the best stories are written by authors who take time to really contemplate and really develop and make their characters relatable and real. I think i would have reacted to the abuse in the same manner that she had. By having characters face moral decisions in ways that changes the character and makes them wiser, one can benefit from reading about the problem and how the characters handled them. Readers are influenced by their readings and one day, if the situation does come up, they, themselves can make a good decision, based on what they have read. Reading teaches and gives a glimpse into a situation that many readers have not experienced and can only do so through reading from those who have experienced it. Joey seems like an awesome person that many girls can relate to. I felt so warm inside reading about how much they loved each other. I think you delivered and expressed their feelings for each other very well. You did an awesome job. I also liked that the story is centered around Joey, but by reading about the relationships between Mark and Eve, adding things about the parents and what happens at school, the world that the story takes place in seems more realistic. As if something like this could be happening some place in the world right now and hopefully all goes. I do hope that you will deliver more information as to why Eve and Jake\'s father and mother are the way they are. Family seems like a very important part of Joey\'s life, but not much information is said about her parents. I do get the impression though that they are very supportive of her rights to making her own decisions, but by not adding more information about the parents, they really don\'t seem an important aspect of her life. I hope i\'m not being overly critical. I don\'t want to sound too critical. I truly loved the story. And as the author, you have the ultimate right to lead the reader to a conclusion in the manner that you want. Again, I applaud your creativity and writing skills. Bravo!

(cries) enuf witht he angst! i have trouble reminding some stuff so foamyfan15010 reminded me that in the first chapter jo is single, (something happend to eve and jake) foamyfan15010 and i believe its to do with eve and jake\'s father, i believe, hopefully not tho, that he killed jake and eve in a drunken rage. i hope thats not the case and everything works out fine.

Wolf

I am in love with your series.

I love the angsty parts of this story. I\'ve really grown attached to the characters and the angst makes it more genuine and heartfelt. Good job!

Oh, you\'re evil.
And now, Jake comes home to find that their father was home when Eve arrived.
Though I still love your writing. It\'s great. While reading this story in particular, it\'s like I feel everything that Joanne does (being a girl helps) and I totally understand how she feels. Of course, she\'s stronger than I am. In that last scene, I just would\'ve broken down crying (practically did on this end of the story).

ok i won\'t say anything......
Just
You\'re a great writter, i love your stories.........but why ohhhh why does it have to be so sad!!!! I swear I\'d cry if i could ;___;
KILL this damn father!!!!!! >o< I so hate jake with his \"don\'t tell everyone or we break up\" and joanne for once is right!!! way to go joey!!!!! but kinda hard on you and jake.........

waiting for next chapie!

Chapter 14 was so sad I got so into it I was teary eyed. I feel so bad for Jake and his predicament. Thank goodness Mark and Joanne are going to do something about it. Good chapter and what would this story be without all that angst. Thanks for updating I truly appreciate it.

Tirch dear, this is almost becoming too painful to read. you\'re tugging at my heartstrings way too much! Jo and Jake break up, make up, and now they\'re...they\'re in this terrible limbo. i\'ll give it up for Jo and Mark\'s courage to do what\'s right, but damn, i\'m crying! there must be mounds, upon heaping mounds of fluff to make up for all this angst.

but don\'t get me wrong, i\'m still hopelessly addicted to your writing. so while i\'m in this emotional pile of rubble, i\'m very pleased to say that it\'s because your story has entertained and entralled me to this degree. i know i sound odd, but i do love your work and appreciate the effort you put into it. thank you!

i\'ll be waiting for updates for this story, Original Sin, and Common. ^_^

I\'m crying right now. I honestly am. :P Haha.. of course, I\'ve always been somewhat of a crybaby when it comes to stuff like this, but still. ;) I think it just about proves how wonderfully moving your writing is, and how you really do have the ability to bring words to life, cliche as it may sound. ;)

more, please? :D (although if you choose to update Original Sin, then that\'s perfectly fine too! :D)

It\'s about damn time SOMEONE said something to the authorities about the abuse Jake and Eve\'s asshole dad is inflicting on them. AUGH. This chapter made me cry. I completely agree with Mike and Joanne. If you love someone, you do everything you can to keep them safe. I just hope that Jake will forgive Jo and realize that she\'s just trying to protect him... Anyhoo, great chapter. I can\'t wait \'till your next update!