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for Once upon a time

by KendraLR

person Lilac
schedule April 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
nice start .. you've peak my interest.... hope you update soon.
schedule January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you really should write more on this story i really enjoy the idea, and i hope you update soon!!!
person dream
schedule December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow..this is really good I'm suprised that I'm the only reviewer. The only suggestion I can make is that you continue or 'keep up the good work'. =D
person Mitts
schedule December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The summary was good, obviously meant to draw the reader in...but the ending of the first chapter wasn't so good. You haven't left much to tease the reader into wanting to come back for more. A little cliff hanger, or a bit of angst would be good.
Looking forward though to seeing how you do in the next chapter...