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March 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I don't know if you check your reviews anymore, but thought I'd comment anyway. This was a short, but sweet story. It's a tragic and nicely emotional concept. The formatting is a little trying, and there are errors here and there, but barring that, it was a beautiful story.
If you do write more, the language thing is a little distracting from the story. I don't know how others feel about it, but for me, if there's a few italicized words in another language that don't require translation, it's good. But when all or most of the dialogue is understood to be in another language, it's easier on me, as a reader, to note it once and write it in English... if that makes any sense.
I hope you write more. I'd like to see an updated version of this story some day.
If you do write more, the language thing is a little distracting from the story. I don't know how others feel about it, but for me, if there's a few italicized words in another language that don't require translation, it's good. But when all or most of the dialogue is understood to be in another language, it's easier on me, as a reader, to note it once and write it in English... if that makes any sense.
I hope you write more. I'd like to see an updated version of this story some day.