rate_review Reviews

Love it! Please write more soon.

Wanted to say, interesting story with nice potential, but you need smaller paragraphs. Maybe it\'s just my computer but it seemed like the \"paragraphs\" were a hundred lines of type. If I looked away from the page it took me five minutes to find where I stopped reading. I was interested enough to deal with it, but you might lose some readers because it is a bit hard to read. But it was worth a read, smiles. Good luck with it.

very good chapter, can't wait to r and and and thanks for taking my advice it's so much easier to read :)

Very good start, although you should try and space the paragraphs more so it isn't so hard to read. I really like what you have written so far and am looking forward to reading more.

Kickass s. I. I really really like it so far-- update soon, I can't wait to read more!