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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love it! Please write more soon.
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wanted to say, interesting story with nice potential, but you need smaller paragraphs. Maybe it\'s just my computer but it seemed like the \"paragraphs\" were a hundred lines of type. If I looked away from the page it took me five minutes to find where I stopped reading. I was interested enough to deal with it, but you might lose some readers because it is a bit hard to read. But it was worth a read, smiles. Good luck with it.
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September 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
very good chapter, can't wait to r and and and thanks for taking my advice it's so much easier to read :)
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September 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very good start, although you should try and space the paragraphs more so it isn't so hard to read. I really like what you have written so far and am looking forward to reading more.
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September 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Kickass s. I. I really really like it so far-- update soon, I can't wait to read more!