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January 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m glad to finally be able to read the finished product. I was one of those intrigued by the story line and engrossed in it without taking the time to review it. Sorry! I\'ll remedy it now.
Your story was extremely enjoyable because of the wit and humour of the main character for me. I enjoyed her take on each situation she got into and how she thought things through to create harmony. The other characters were sensationally believable, strangely enough, for the type of story it happeo beo be. I could very well imagine walking into such an apartment building and finding these characters living uneasily comfortably.
Thanks again for finishing it! Several times a week I would search for another chapter and would be disappointed to not find one.
Your story was extremely enjoyable because of the wit and humour of the main character for me. I enjoyed her take on each situation she got into and how she thought things through to create harmony. The other characters were sensationally believable, strangely enough, for the type of story it happeo beo be. I could very well imagine walking into such an apartment building and finding these characters living uneasily comfortably.
Thanks again for finishing it! Several times a week I would search for another chapter and would be disappointed to not find one.
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon! I can\'t believe not many people are reviewing this! This fiction is really great. I don\'t usually read orignals because they don\'t really appeal to me like you fanfictions do but I\'m glad this one did because I am happy I didn\'t miss this story. It\'s really great and I will love you forever when you update this story!
Huhz
SarahS
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SarahS
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January 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hallöle!
Great story! I\'m really curious how you will resolve the love dilemma. Funny thing that the Light-Bulb-Demon is the only one who hasn\'t got hidden motives (like \"I just can\'t wait to be king\" Leo) or a certain horror of female independence (like \"caveman\" Thor)...
So who will it be? And what about daddy dearest? Can\'t see him just giving up.
Your characters are just great. They have facets, original personalities and (sometimes) one or another lovable neurosis. I had fun and would like to read more!
owlet
Great story! I\'m really curious how you will resolve the love dilemma. Funny thing that the Light-Bulb-Demon is the only one who hasn\'t got hidden motives (like \"I just can\'t wait to be king\" Leo) or a certain horror of female independence (like \"caveman\" Thor)...
So who will it be? And what about daddy dearest? Can\'t see him just giving up.
Your characters are just great. They have facets, original personalities and (sometimes) one or another lovable neurosis. I had fun and would like to read more!
owlet
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December 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I really love the originality of this. Even though most stories in this section are people\'s own creation, they still seem to mimic one another, yours doesn\'t do that. Please continue updating. As for constructive criticism...there are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing that can\'t be easily fixed.
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November 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Well I like it but shouldn\'t there be more if it\'s finished?
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November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Alright, I’ll try this again. Every time I try to review ory ory AFF dies on me…
I’m really enjoying “One Foot In.”
The way you started the story was pretty clever. My attention was immediately caught by the phrase “…and my ex-boyfriend had stuffed all my clothes in paper bags and left them out on the curb.” I’ve been looking for updates everyday since.
I’m really intrigued by Leo, and what’s going on with him and Thor. When Thor was first introduced, it made me think of Gaiman’s American Gods book, and I wondered if this Thor might be any relation to the actual god. As it is, you’ve made it seem the ise is purely human, but still… I have my doubts…
The run-in with the ex was surprising, but helped to reinforce that Josh does in fact exist. He truly does come across as an ass…
The third chapter was a bit odd, (or weirder) than the others. I wonder if Cindy will manifest her father’s War Leader qualities. The break-in/intruder issue is never resolved; one moment a claxon is blaring, and Cindy’s running down a hallway with a gun, and the next she’s helping a Ratman get stitched back together… Was Alar the intruder? Was that why everything calmed down after they found him?
Either way, I’m very much looking forward to the next update…
I’m really enjoying “One Foot In.”
The way you started the story was pretty clever. My attention was immediately caught by the phrase “…and my ex-boyfriend had stuffed all my clothes in paper bags and left them out on the curb.” I’ve been looking for updates everyday since.
I’m really intrigued by Leo, and what’s going on with him and Thor. When Thor was first introduced, it made me think of Gaiman’s American Gods book, and I wondered if this Thor might be any relation to the actual god. As it is, you’ve made it seem the ise is purely human, but still… I have my doubts…
The run-in with the ex was surprising, but helped to reinforce that Josh does in fact exist. He truly does come across as an ass…
The third chapter was a bit odd, (or weirder) than the others. I wonder if Cindy will manifest her father’s War Leader qualities. The break-in/intruder issue is never resolved; one moment a claxon is blaring, and Cindy’s running down a hallway with a gun, and the next she’s helping a Ratman get stitched back together… Was Alar the intruder? Was that why everything calmed down after they found him?
Either way, I’m very much looking forward to the next update…
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i just finished reading i, snape, so i am writing with a buzz. love that man and your stories about him.
i am so glad youve followed up so quickly with yet another story. i am enjoying one foot in, but with trepidation. i like the animal characters being sensitive and empathetic and somewhat human. cindy, if i read corrctly, is only half animal (well, all animal, actually, since, as much as we would like to deny it, we humans are animals, too.) but i digress.
i am enjoying one foot in, thusfar. but am holding my breath hoping there will be no violence between the characters, but then i think, how could there not be. well, how presumpterous of me to suggest how you should write your story. and of course you need to average almost 1700 words daily.
well, no matter what direction this story this goes, i doubt i will be able to put it down. since that was true with all your prior stories.
i am so glad youve followed up so quickly with yet another story. i am enjoying one foot in, but with trepidation. i like the animal characters being sensitive and empathetic and somewhat human. cindy, if i read corrctly, is only half animal (well, all animal, actually, since, as much as we would like to deny it, we humans are animals, too.) but i digress.
i am enjoying one foot in, thusfar. but am holding my breath hoping there will be no violence between the characters, but then i think, how could there not be. well, how presumpterous of me to suggest how you should write your story. and of course you need to average almost 1700 words daily.
well, no matter what direction this story this goes, i doubt i will be able to put it down. since that was true with all your prior stories.