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The thing

By: vidalhbea

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Category: Horror/Thriller › General

Rating: Adult +

Chapters: 1

Views: 1,258

Reviews: 2

Recommended: 0

Currently Reading: 0

Disclaimer: This is fiction , so any and all names and likeness is coincidence.

The thing

Another year has come and gone . Another year that marks the anniversary of Tom , my friend's death . Sigh . So...let me start at the beginning . My name is Nicky Lee ,and one night ,on a Halloween , me and Tom Waters were spending the weekend at his parents cabin . It was gonna be fun he said . I had never been out in the country , so I thought it would be fun . Anyway , we got there and it was cool . The cabin was pretty big . Tom's parents had the main room which was on the far corner if the cabin , Edith , Tom's sister had her own room , me and Tom would be sharing a room ,which was fine with me , it was upstairs . We settle in and rest a bit then Mr.Waters asks us to bring in some firewood from the shed outside and tells us that we can explore the area when we're done . I help Tom and we bring in plenty of firewood . When we're done we go outside as Mrs. Waters tells us not to go too far and to be careful . My eight year self happily romped along with my friend . If only I knew that it would be the last time we would ever get to play together . I miss him so much . Sigh.

So we were playing when suddenly we heard what sounded like a grunt . We froze and listened . A moment passed by and we heard nothing else . Then we heard it again , this time it was followed by steps . Thinking it was some sort of wild animal we moved closer to the cabin. As we moved I noticed a shadow . I looked up to see a few trees disturbed . I then had this strange feeling that I was being watched .

We played for about an hourly before we decided to go back inside. Edith was on her phone playing a game , she looked up and smiled . As we were about to go upstairs , Mr. Waters called us . He said that we should go back to the shed and fix the mess we did. Tom and I exchanged looks ,but didn't argue . We went back outside and to the shed . The firewood was knocked over . Confused about how the firewood was not how we left it , Tom and I put it back in its place . I didn't tell Tom , I...I didn't think he knew ,but as we placed the wood back , I saw this huge shadow in the corner of the shed and we could hear a rustle . Trying to be brave I talked to Tom and kept him distracted . He was putting the last log in the pile when I spotted something . I took a closer look . On the wall I could see four scratch marks . Tom came over and frowned as he noticed the marks . Suddenly we heard a thud and then a grunt. Scared we ran back to the cabin .

Tom tried to tell his parents about the marks and then the noise , but they told us that since we were in the woods , animals could sometime come around . We weren't convinced though . We did our best to forget the incident and decided that maybe Mr.Waters was right . So we had dinner and talked .Mrs.Waters had made a meatloaf before we came here so all she had to do was put in the oven . Mmm , it smelled so good . Let me tell you , her meatloaf was the best and I was shameless as I ate my fill . As we ate and talked suddenly a loud ,what I could only describe as a screech was heard. We froze as we heard it again followed by a thump on the roof. Then ...a scratching . Mr.Waters stood up and walked to the window and peered outside . He squinted as he looked . Suddenly he cried out and jerked away from the window. We all jumped and cried out .Mr. Waters then turned around looked at us and laughed . It was just a possum he said . We chuckled nervously . Dinner was concluded without further incident and then we helped Mrs.Waters clean . The cabin didn't have a t.v .so we spent the rest of the evening playing card games . While we played ,I couldn't help but have this overwhelming feeling that I was being watched .I would look at the window occasionally . I tried to concentrate , but the feeling was so strong that it grated on my nerves . I didn't know it then ,but that...that ...thing must have been watching us .

The next day Tom woke me and I sluggishly got myself dressed for the day . slept very little the night before . I kept having these horrible nightmares . In them I would see this shadow . Just this human looking ,but not human looking thing .I couldn't make out any of its features , except for these claw like hands reaching out to me and glowing white eyes . In my dream , in my nightmare I could hear screams . Horrible agonizing screams for help. I could also hear that grunting . As I tried to get away the shadow followed me . Just when my torment seemed to go Tom appeared and he reached out to me . As I ran to him ,I failed to notice as the shadow behind me or the look of horror on my friends face . When I reached him , Tom lifted his hand .I stared in wide eyed shock as the hand then transformed into a shiny leathery appendage with four claws for fingers , I glanced at his face which had a blank stare . Tom opened his mouth ,but instead of words ,he grunted .

The horror of that nightmare has stayed with me even after all these years . I still have them . I relive that night that changed my life.

That morning Mr.Waters wants to go into town so we go and get some things . Tom and I entertain ourselves by trying to see what the other is thinking . We get back to the cabin and as we are about to get out of the van , we see something that keeps us from approaching the cabin . The door is wide open . Mr.Waters tells us to stay in the van and he gets out and walks toward the cabin . We wait anxiously as the minutes tick by . It seems like forever , but a short time later Mr.Waters comes out . He says it's okay to go inside .

We look at the mess left . It looks like an animal was in here. Mr.Waters echoes my thoughts and tells us somehow an animal must have gotten inside and ransacked the place . We spent the next few hours cleaning and putting things back to the way they were.When we're done Mrs.Waters treats us to some fruit salad . I thank her and I dig in . When we're done we go outside to get some firewood . As we near the shed ,that feeling of being watched hits me . Instinctively I look around , but see nothing . As we grab the firewood in the shed I am overcome with dread . I feel like I'm in danger. I'm eight and don't know why ,but I have this overwhelming feeling that I'm not safe here .

We go back inside and by this time I'm so paranoid , I keep looking over my shoulder expecting to see something . Tom notices this and asks what's wrong with me . I don't want to scare him ,and I tell him nothing. If only that were true .

The rest of the day passed by quickly . We had gone hiking and while it was fun , I still had that terrible feeling that that we were being watched . In fact several times I know I saw shadows in the trees and an occasional grunt . Mr.Waters chalked up my paranoia to animals . Somehow I knew that wasn't true . I found it odd since I had not seen one. I found that strange . What I found strange also were these four marks that I would find .

Finally we went back to the cabin after the hike . So much was happening that I was expecting the place to a mess . I was relieved that it wasn't . Maybe I was just being crazy .

The scream woke me from my sleep . I bolted up from bed and looked around . Thinking that I had imagined it , I laid back down . A second scream had me nearly falling off the bed . Tom was gone ,but was too busy running downstairs to think about it . Edith was crying as Mrs Waters held her. Before I could figure out what was going on , she began saying that she had seen something outside of her window . Poor Edith was so distraught , she didn't make sense at first . She calmed down enough and began to tell us what had her so upset . She was awakened by a loud noise , she got up to see what it was and...and that's when my blood ran cold . Edith , she saw a human looking shadow with white glowing eyes and long arms with four clawed fingers . "You saw it too ." I looked at her wide eyed not realizing that I spoke . She turned to me with the same look of horror , but she didn't say anything she didn't have to . Poor Edith , she was such a good sister , she didn't deserve to die like that . She probably knew it , but I had a little crush on her.

Mr.Waters came back from checking outside . He didn't see nothing .But I could tell that something was bothering him . Suddenly Edith looks toward the window and points as she let out a scream . I look just as I see a large shadow pass by . Tom and I huddle together and gasp as we hear what sounds like thumps along the cabin . Mr.Waters tells us to go upstairs . Sigh that was the last place we should've been . I can still picture Tom's face as that thing took him . I remember Mrs.Waters's screams as it grabbed her son who had sacrificed himself do that I could live . But it's not living. It's hell .

I...I can't do this , I can't . No I ,I have to for Tom , for Edith. They deserve to have their story told , even if no one believes it . Sigh . We went upstairs as Mr.Waters checked the door and windows . Just then a thump . Thump. Thump. Thump . Thump . We looked up at the ceiling . Then quiet . We looked on as Mrs. Waters hesitantly moved toward the window . It broke as this thing crashed through it . We screamed . It was the thing from my nightmare . It stood up and grunted . Then it moved fast toward us . Mr.Waters shouted as he came up. He froze . The creature , the thing stopped . Then it jumped and that's when the horror began . That thing jumped in front of Edith and grabbed her . Edith didn't have time to do anything as it impaled her with those claws . She fell like a ragdoll to the floor ,eyes staring blankly . Before anybody could so much as breath , that thing jumped again , this time in front of me. It looked at me with those demonic eyes and let out this hideous grunting-like screech as it shoved it's claws into my stomach . I looked at the thing for what seemed forever. Suddenly it let out another grunt/screech it let me go and I fell to the floor . Mr.Waters had stabbed it with a knife . It staggered a little before it righted itself . It screeched again ,only this time it seemed angry . I tried to get up , but I was in so much pain . It saw what I was doing and raised its claw . I closed my eyes expecting to die . Only then I heard something . I opened my eyes just to meet Tom's shocked expression . I didn't know what was going until I saw blood gush out of my friends mouth and he coughed . The things claws were red with blood and glistening with Toms entrails .Then I heard a shriek and I turned to see Mrs.Waters let out an anguished scream . That was all I remember before losing consciousness.

I woke up to find out both my best friend and his sister had been killed by this thing . Mr.Waters and Mrs.Waters were never the same . Mrs Waters lost the will to live and Mr.Waters left her . I feel so bad for them . Sometimes I wish that thing had killed me . Now ten years later I still carry the guilt .

Along with scars that thing left me . Happy anniversary Tom , I miss you .

I hope this came right . Let me know what you think , Huggles , bea .

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