messages from devils

This is my first poem that actually worked!

please review I need some confidence to keep writing,my next thing will be a story a lot of mushy stuff,but then again, if you cant get it out on here where can you get it out!


Messages From Devils>

To ye of whom belive in fate,
Pray hear my message clear,
For when you cross the crystal gates,
Succumb to dread and fear.

Theres no escape from hate and lust,
Or shelters from desires,
Your soul shall dwell among the frost,
Of omnipore sent fires.

So ye who choose to walk fates path,
Beware the smouldering coals,
Misplace thy step and feel the wrath,
Of innocent tortured souls.

Fear not the viper or the asp,
Your soul they shell not taint,
But take one sip and feel the grasp,
Of many fallen saints.

So view the world and all its death,
Its rancid cold corruption,
And as you gasp your final breath,
Dont make the crude assumption.

That fate assigns you to a place,
Heaven hell or purgatory,
All fate will do is claw your face,
And tell you your life story.

So ye of whom belive my message,
now i\'v told you now you\'ve heard,
And should you attempt your passage,
Please remember every word.

Abandon hate or lust and dread,
while enduring your decent,
It is thy choise within thy head,
To anger or repent.


I hope you like it,please review and then ill writs some more,if your not too depressed