The Exposition Fairy, by Thundercloud
- First of all, what a great title! It really roused my curiosity as to what the story was going to be about. It also gave me the impression that the target audience for this story is other writers, which of course I can't disapprove of.:-)
- The fact that the fairy has to provide exposition for everything Peter looks makes her condition seem like a curse. But it's a pretty darn funny curse, especially once Peter starts looking at sex toys and making the fairy explain them to him.
- The exposition fairy seems like she might be a character in a video game or a text adventure, in that she provides both direction and information to the player. I'm wondering if that's what you had in mind when you wrote the story.
- There were a few language issues (FYI, mixing up "lending" with "borrowing") but nothing that interfered with my ability to understand the story.
- I like how the fairy rotates in the air as she sucks Peter's cock. Great use of her powers for erotic purposes. Good use of her size, too; being deepthroated by a woman who's no bigger than a halfling sounds pretty hot.
- I like the reveal of fairies' secret weakness at the end. Even if Peter is stuck performing the fairy king's quest, at least he's going to have a lot of fun along the way.
Slither, by InvidiaRed
There were some bits of language in here that I really liked (eg, the description of bacon as "the forbidden meat candy"). But I found the story hard to follow, mainly for the same reason that I found it hard to follow in "Vampire Gynoids From the Future": the confusing use of punctuation and sentence fragments. Take this paragraph: "As the serpent coiled like a lamb. A danger not just to the sheep but the shepherd as well." The first sentence is an introductory phrase that doesn't introduce anything, leaving the reader not knowing what was happening as the serpent coiled. The second sentence presumably describes the serpent but has no subject or verb to make that clear.
Being an editor makes me hypersensitive to these things, so maybe others are better to interpret this story than I am.
Vampire Gynoids From The Future
I think this is one of your stories that I enjoyed most with its very cool scenery...except it does not feel like a complete story but more like a promotional extract from the real story.
The bad bit is that it feels to me like you watching a tv-show and just before the last commercial break the thing happen with the Gynoid happen...but after the break there is nothing and I am left with the feeling that I read a build up for something that never came. I don't feel confused but rather like the story ended prematurely.
The bottom line is that I think your material would work much better as a single larger story where you include the full story arc to its conclusion rather than giving us a string of stories where we are given puzzle pieces but never get to see things resolved. Thanks anyway for giving us this holiday story.
Slither
Okay...I sort of read it to the end but honestly I didn't get it at all. It just seemed like random fights between gods about something that is not explained while namedropping the names of other gods again and again. I suppose there is a story burried in there, but I cannot make sense of why anything happened.
Naughty and Nice
I cannot say how good the story works for somebody joining it fresh, but for me as a returning reading this was a very satisfying conclusion to your trilogy. The final answer for how the naughty and nice list was "manipulated" seemed fitting and clever.
As you might have remebered I claim Anthro is really one of my kinks...but when it is not well written like this I cannot really mind. Some really good antler-chaser action and I am left with a-shame-the-calendar-is-not-real feeling. Thanks for given us such a erotic story.
Finally, A reason for people to like Navi!
Vampire Gynoids From The Future, by InvidiaRed
I don't claim to understand the plot of this story, but there's certainly some vivid imagery.
Naughty and Nice
That conclusion was worth it. Cause damn it was satisfying.