Part 3 – Review - a bit spoilery etc etc
The opening with the urban exploring – why it keeps going badly really makes sense later on in the chapter, initially it feels like maybe she’s just panicking and getting lost or mixed up, even with the laugh that could just be another homeless druggy. Going back and reading it again after the later reveals actually adds a bit more to it. I guess it looked a bit bleak for Ronja before Maria’s big damn heroes kick! That was kind of cool.
I liked how it set up the shower, the dildo talk, and then the hot screwing – it’s almost like they’d have gone for it even without the spell at that point. Ronja and Maria make a great horny couple. Just those two having sex in different ways and different places is pretty damn cool. I think the later outside sex scene was probably just slightly the hotter of the two – mostly because of Ronja doing her best to keep attention on her and hide Maria from the pervy Mikaela and her camera. It’s pretty hot that she’s putting on a show like that.
Then skipping back a little, Part 3 is when we get the reveal that it isn’t just hypnosis/computer hacking/John messing around. I see the name Tomas Andersson I wonder if he’s living in the mirror or in the matrix. Some of his abilities do kind of feel like someone hacking the matrix... No, joking aside I get that it’s just a common name – Ronja’s “That was a mundane name” helps with the context for sure. The guy’s a total dick. I kinda hope he gets his comeuppance one of these chapters! We’ll see, I guess.
On the other hand, some of the stuff he pulls is pretty funny - playing the animal porn in the background on the phonecall for one, and messing with John by giving him a flash up Ronja’s skirt for another. Poor John – he’s got his spell to watch dildo fun and he keeps getting inadvertantly flashed by his step sister, but so far all he’s got is a calloused hand.
For the ending I’d normally be saying this was the hottest scene, but that outside Ronja/Maria one just pips it. That dirty mirror ghost with his bondage/hypno combination – I liked how Ronja decided she could just go ahead and enjoy it since she didn’t have the responsibility, and Roy seemed like he had a great time. Also “Ronja felt faint as she thought about the humiliation if her brother found her covered in dog cum and bondage gear,” is just a great line.
Chapter 2 – review contains spoilers.
Another fun part. As with Chapter 1, whenever Ronja is playing herself it comes across sexy as all hell. What feels like more sublte foreshadowing in there too - and less subtle, in Roy's case.
Looking at specific bits -
Heck of an awkward morning for poor Ronja; no clean dry panties and the worrying realisation she might have trance-ordered bondage gear. Still, we’ve all been there. Sounds like a fun batch of gear as well. Though short, the following masturbation scene with her oblivious to the webcam focussing in is pretty hot. It’s like the reader is drawn into the camera’s voyeurism. But oh! She has new panties after all! Well, I suppose panty-flash fans may demand it. I’ve heard they’re an active bunch.
...oooh, unexpected shocks. Ouch! And yet another embarrassing situation with the handyman seeing her. Heh, those modified panties do sound like they have some potential though. And Maria sounds like she might have been overdoing things with her second hand sex toy.
The whole scene in the gymnasium, then the store room, is just about perfect. Loved the build up with her working out and getting hornier and hornier thanks to that accidental dose of aphrodisiac on her clothing, and then getting caught and photo’d and coerced into the 69 with the Asian assistant teacher. It’s just an incredibly hot scene, with Ronja not able to quite keep herself quiet as she comes and really getting into her first time with a woman (though I guess her first oral was Roy?)
One thing I would say though is that you might consider a trigger warning because of the elements that it implies she only agrees to the sex because the aphrodisiac is making her intoxicated, and the teacher has taken the obscene photos and basically says she has to have sex to stop them being spread. While this kind of content is a-ok in my book, it really can upset some readers if they come across it unexpectedly, especially if something similar has actually happened to them (with a different intoxicant to the fictional aphrodisiac.) This isn’t a criticism of the content! I liked it!
Heh, And I guess I see what you mean with the beast stuff being back in part 3, with Mark off to NYC to see the... uh, to hear about the sights.
"Sure, I can take care of him if you provide me with the right equipment," Ronja said.
Hey, I bet Roy’s got the right equipment all on his own, am I right? Red rocket blasting off again! Sorry, sorry. With all the hints there’s a good air of mystery around Maria’s night time escapades. Ronja thinks it’s the dildo, but it does keep the reader interested that it might be more.
The theory she has at the end that it might be John messing with her, well, it sounds logical, but it feels definitely that there’s something supernatural going on - you’ve got the clues there for the reader – the weird fantasy of Maria masturbating with the dildo, the strange text again from the hospital, the fact that the fantasy correctly has Maria’s new hair like a remote view... yeah, I’m taking the something spooky going on.
Also, I laughed out loud both with Ronja being caught playing with herself in John’s room, and then him trying to catch her but failing because his hand is down his pants. It just struck me as incredibly funny!
I am looking forward to part 3!
Chapter 1 review – Some spoiler bits because otherwise my reviews tend to be “Yeah, liked it.”
Paragraph one, establishing a love of dogs right away. Foreshadowing? Well, we’ll see... Decently detailed intro, you’ve got Ronja’s physical description, details of family relationship, the interest in the self-hypnosis and the urban exploration all coming in without overloading.
During the exploring I though the dialogue over Maria being left with the dildo “used”, and Ronja joshing about a ghost was funny. Whatever bad things come from them taking the stuff, well, they really should have remembered not take stuff while exploring. Bad form, that is. Take nothing but pictures and all that. The mirror is almost glossed over with the dildo talk, yet the implication from the title is that it plays a bigger part. Nicely understated!
With certain spooky elements like the mention of the ghost I guess a gratuitous shower scene is pretty apt. Can’t blame John for his reaction at seeing her naked given her physical description. Certain hints of step-cest ?
That masturbation scene is hot! Seriously. It’s a really good one, some lovely detail and using the mirror to check herself out added a fun extra kink. Her little fantasy too, pushing herself over... As for the mirror, will absolute power corrupt absolutely? I guess we’ll find out. Really fun little self-play there though.
And then, wow, WOW, a little accident, removal of leggings and Roy the wonder dog. There’s something incredibly hot about him going to work with his tongue while his owner is oblivious. “Just sniffing” eh? That danger of getting caught, too, there against the wall, the sense of wrongness and dirtyness but still enjoying the feeling. Great section.
Heh, poor John getting a flash of ass and dropping the spice bottle. Poor 16 year old probably got a bit shocked there!
Then the ending, with the filthy porn emails she can’t quite get rid of... I guess the suggestion is that Ronja will end up doing some of the things she sees in the porn? A bit of foreshadowing?
So by the end of Chapter one there’s those growing hints of something that may be supernatural (strangely cold mirror, coincidence & fantasy or porn and reality) or may just be mundane eg the webcam could be remotely controlled... we readers don’t know yet. Just don’t know.
It took a bit of time to read but I’m glad I’ve started as I’m interested to read more of Ronja and Maria, and John (...and Roy) and some sizzling erotic writing in there too.
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