Chapter 10. Spoilers in review below!
Well, it’s been 3 and a half years since I got back to havea look, but within the first few words it was all flooding back. The assholeghost! Man, I hope he gets his some day.
I enjoyed the opening scene, Ronja sort of having controlfor a second with her pretend hypno acting and imagining Maria, only to kind ofget it turned on her as “John†just used her face and left her lying there. Theghost actually wanting the masturbation on the table was an amusing escalation.I guess it won’t be catching up on the morning papers!
Then another Mark and dog part! I know Ronja’s had to dosome messed up things to get by, but actually making her do the math study? Ikid, actually her being naked around the blind guy and the dog is hot. Heh, kindashot himself in the foot by not getting her off first, didn’t he? So then shegoes for the dog. That whole decision to just be unfaithful with too cocks feltlike self justification because she’s more into the dog than she wants toadmit.
Oh, right Mikaela! I’d forgotten about her, actually. Still,seems like a smart move from Maria to go for mutually assured destructionthreat to end the blackmail. If it doesn’t somehow go wrong or get turnedagainst her, I mean Maria and Ronja are normally so lucky! I actually laughedout loud at the exchange
“Maria beamed at Mikaela as she sent the recorded voicemessage. “I sent it now. No point of my phone suffering an accident.â€
“You look peachy for somebody that will get fucked by a malecock soon,†Mikaela said.â€
Yeah, the sarcasm really drips off there.
The scene with Frank, well, he was pretty keen not to befucking a 16 year old. That’s gotta make him the most decent guy so far. Also,second laugh out loud was him getting one over Mikaela at least for now. Nobodybeats the landlord!
…and the unsolicited dick pic ending. Cliffhanger orcockhanger?
These long detailed chapters take some time to get through,but I hope to read and review 11 before long too!
Was a fan of this on sexstories.com, glad to have found it again and glad it's continued
I have just started reading Chapter 1 after seeing your promotion on the forum. So far, the story is very well written and interesting. I put it on my "recommended reading" and "reading now" lists so I don't lose it. I definately plant to read the entire thing through, at least as far as you have it written.
I haven't visited Sweden. However, your background descriptions so far are quite good, and help me envision that I am in Stockholm while reading your story.
Twisted but so hot
Chapter 9! It’s been great fun getting in with the characters. I’d say my favourite sex scene was the one she watched on the computer screen from when she was in the trance, but going for that washing machine trope was pretty hot for all that seeing it appear made me laugh some. There seemed to be an issue with the formatting with a few lines somehow splitting down onto the next line, but I don’t know if that’s just a firefox thing or if it shows for you too – might be worth checking, example:
Getting everything inside the washing machine with one hand was difficult. Ronja struggled with it until she realized that she never attached the spreader bar to her neck. If she bent her neck forward,
she could stretch her arms, so she got the bar connecting her hands in front of her.
Just throwing it out there is it could be a pretty quick fix. The only other thing that really stuck out for me was “straight jacket” – I’m just more used to seeing it as straitjacket so it jarred a little. Others might say different!
SPOILER THOUGHTS –
I was thinking that it felt really realistic for her to wake up and comment on how sleeping in the bondage left her aching, and then it felt like foreshadowing too when it turned out John both railed and fisted her while in the trance. No wonder she woke up so sore with that kinda rough stuff! Still cute seeing her interactions with Maria, her one true love tho’! Per above, was really hot to see her masturbating first to herself in the bondage and then the description of John fucking and fisting her. Is all the raw sex the ghost’s attempt to breed a new body? Good thing she doesn’t get puppies really…
Maria’s subplot with agreeing to make the porno for Mikaela – I hope she is able to get one over the blackmailer. I mean, the ghost is a supernatural pervert. Those dead guys are probably morally dubious anyway, but Mikaela’s human and supposed to be in a position of trust. Am interested to see what Maria comes up with for her though!
So… so… Julia’s reaction. Does she fancy some of dat Ronja? Is one of the reasons she does very little in the way of sex with guys, and just flirts etc for drinks’n’ that because she’s really not that interested in them? I guess the costume party is her chance? I can’t imagine the ghost would object? :D You do have ghosty keen for Ronja going after all. I also liked how Mark turning up was a chance for Ronja to remember fucking the dog, and the later mention about how apart from the surprise buttsex she was pretty fucking happy with the feel of it all. She’s an animal lover, it’s all hot the way you write it!
John’s fiancée fantasy – it actually sounds like it’s kind of wholesome! Marriage and romance in the air! But it’s totally perverted, so is all good. I thought it was cool and funny the way the character made Ronja giggle so much. Slapping and playing with her ass/pussy when she was preparing was a cool touch, and I liked the messy feeding bit, too.
Straight up laughed out loud when Ronja got herself genuinely caught in the washing machine and John literally called out the trope, but then when he took advantage of it it was actually really hot and not a joke, because of the hypnotism and her being genuinely trapped rather than the fake stuck in version.
The fuck on the bed, with her coming really hard, is still a strong scene and image, and him rawdogging his step-sister again! It is good stuff, I just liked the first two better. And then the look of the ghost in John, suggesting rather than needing a new body, he’s maybe slowly getting John’s?
Anyway, great part!
Chapter 8 – spoiler warnings for review!
Whoo! You’re on a roll lately. Back to pre-pandemic Stockholm we go. And the cliffhanger of who has caught them is revealed! I’m glad I didn’t have a bet on The Scooby Gang on vacation. In many ways they’re lucky it wasn’t an American government building – at least they didn’t get shot! I did half wonder If it was gonna turn into a guards on girls gangbang but they turned out to be honest joes! Good on ‘em,
Genuinely can’t tell if the ghost does find the police involvement an issue or just used it to get more out of Ronja. Now I start worrying about Maria reading the site and getting upset with Ronja – I guess Ronja could always claim it was just her fantasy tho? Ghost’s method of scaring the police into crashing was pretty effective, and that description of him panicking the chasing cop into firing wildly was cool! I think it’s partly that we just get the sound effects so it’s more atmospheric if that makes sense.
That one line about Ronja thinking of squeezing Maria into her clothes. Heh. She ain’t so innocent that Ronja girl :p
Maria’s self examination while waiting was hot – something about that line of remembering the fingers in her ass. She has a new interest! Totally makes sense she’d be keen on taking a shower too. Running around naked and the rest of the evening’s activities got her grubby!
Getting it from Maria’s POV so we can’t hear the ghost talking to Maria works well. That awkwardness over the mirror and then the feeling that the ghost is probably suggesting some perverted things, but Maria’s up for it an spreading herself! It was also really hot the way it started with Ronja masturbating under her skirt as Maria watched. Super sexy.
Then I did laugh a little at Maria’s reaction to just how many sex toys Ronja had. It’s like her girlfriend had levelled up in the perversion – and this is while she has her hypnotised and is looking for something to stick in her ass! Fucking loved how she didn’t forget her desire for a shower either. Sorts Ronja out in the bondage, goes and has that damn shower! That’ll teach Ronja to just give her a blanket when she needs to get clean :D
The fuck session was also really hot. The lesbian stuff in this story has been great overall. When Ronja finally gets to lick, and using the mirror to watch them fucking… and I loved that reasoning for leaving Ronja in the straitjacket.
Really enjoyed part 8!
It continues! Was really happy to see another part of this one, too. It really didn’t take long to get back into Ronja’s world, and I still feel a lot of sympathy for her. Took me a good time to read, but that length means you fit in much more events and detail, and it’s good stuff! All of the sexual content was just hot as heck, with all of the variety this story has had!
SPOILERY REVIEW BELOW. Warning. Spoilers.
I thought this was going to be the hottest scene until I got to the haunted building near the end – Ronja in full dog cosplay mode is incredibly hot, and John is convinced she’s into it all because of the notes and awkward situations so he doesn’t come across as an especially bad guy. Ronja’s reaction while watching her own porno was fuckin’ sexy – it’s definitely unclear how much of it is hypno triggers and how much is her own psychology. I thought it was funny her saying the note was a joke only for it to have been a “help with math” note – and it was pretty awesome that the hypnotic state actually allowed her to retain the statistics knowledge and scrape a pass.
Maria’s playing with herself was fun, but it really kicked off when she was on the phone to Ronja – I really liked their non-pervy interractions as well, although it was extra sexy when Ronja was getting a little too frisky in public.
The original ghost’s “You are in quite a mess my little slave. Entering a haunted place without the mirror with you. The distance is too large so I cannot compete with the horny spirit that has captured you. You are on your own for now,” actually made me laugh – mostly because I was wondering just how he’d compete if the mirror was there, “Back off, Casper! This is my sex slave! You can have Julia, Jonathan isn’t bothered…” Then with John apparently hearing that blowing in her mouth towards the end, I wondered if it was the same ghost somehow manifested in the haunted spot from the mirror. Power growing with time and everything.
And As I mentioned earlier the scene with this ghost was really hot – very inventive ghost sex, I especially liked how it got the fisting and fingering going, and then that ghostly oral, and Maria’s not-serious complaint! Quite the cliffhanger at the end though. Is it Mikaela for more blackmail?
The last scene… the ghost be getting a hold over John as a ‘sexual muse’ – it is just able to talk to him or does it extend some control? Random thought - If he likes to look at a reflected cock as he’s jerking does he have some bi-tendencies?
Heck of a good chapter!
Chapter 6 review – contains spoilers!
I thought it was quite funny at the start when her father’s discussing heading off to visit Carol and John’s really enthusiastic about it, and that line about his gaze speaking volumes. It’s the mental image of John, oblivious to Ronja’s real feelings and so his being really keen that made me smile. Plus, him getting his foot up for a rub with her father right there was hot. That whole “secret touching while someone else is there oblivious” is a theme I enjoy the heck out of.
I thought it was a cool how Mikaela got Maria to agree to the threesome without coercion at all. One of the few times one of Ronja’s tormentors made things easier for her –she doesn’t need to lure or persuade her girlfriend into a bad situation if her girlfriend’s already keen and eager! And then it turned out Mikaela was still true to form and basically did it with hoping to blackmail Maria too. That’s a bad teacher! The bondage sex was hot tho’ with the spanking and the licking especially working great. Can’t blame Maria for not realising that Ronja was in greater discomfort than her repeated Pig cries suggested, given her lack of experience at that kind of thing. Was Mikaela aware, given her greater experience, that it was going a bit too far for Ronja’s comfort and just ignoring it? Given her blackmail tendencies she does seem like she wouldn’t care overmuch about Ronja’s comfort. Great scene though!
Jonathan actually comes across a bit better here now I’m thinking of him assuming all the time that Ronja is only doing what she wants to with him, and that she’s giving him a bunch of the ideas – There’s two examples where he seems shocked about not thinking things through – with not allowing her to say no, and what happens after he gets her to act like a dog in front of Roy.
That was another hot scene- Mark, completely blind, has a woman offer herself to him and manages to surprise her with the size of his tool – and it’s sort of sweet how he’s ok with it – I wondered if it was because Roy didn’t show any problems with her, so if Roy trusts her she’s ok?
Ending is kind of bleak – is it bad that I feel worse about her flunking her exam? I guess when chapter 7 comes out we’ll see more!
So, glad to have read all 6 chapters – for this one the threesome with Maria and Mikaela was the hottest scene for sure.
PART 5 review – CONTAINS Spoilers
Kind of a happier starting here to part 4, even if Ronja’s got her concerns over everything. I really like reading Ronja and Maria as a couple and you always seem to nail their sex with hot description. It’s also cool that with all the fucked up stuff happening to her Ronja’s finding she really loves Maria. That’s just sweet. Little things like her ‘shyly’ asking to cuddle, and later on ‘She wanted herself to be the nice girl that Maria thought her to be.’ Also, licking her stepbrother’s cum out of her girlfriend is a hot little kink. So, yeah, romance and hotness making a good combo in the opening.
Jonathan’s still an asshole –even the ghost seems to have more sense and restraint – sure, we don’t know if he’ll stick to the deal but at least he made one over the Hypnoslut videos. Jonathan seems like he doesn’t have limits. Still, the whole hypnosis kink is pretty hot and as Ronja noted it only works because she fantasised about it, so, eh. Also, the way Ronja was excited to get some nice stockings. That was neat, and, as nasty as he is, giving her a compunction to lick her own buttplug (after washing it... ‘cos it isn’t that kind of story :p!) was an amazing idea – which I guess mean’s it is your amazing idea! Good job there.
The hypnotic mute trigger is another hot idea – when she comes and it makes her scream silently, that’s sexy as hell – the whole fuck scene there is great. As good as the last one. The way he leaves her at the end, cuffed, plugged and jizzed on – it’s all great stuff! More showing Jonathan as an asshole too, doing the things he doesn’t really understand and then Ronja can’t speak. I did start to wonder though – does he actually think it’s all non-consensual and he’s really forcing her with hypnotic triggers (so far as it isn’t her desire/fantasy making it work), or does he think she sent him the email of what she wants him to do, and she’s feigning reluctance and actually enthusiastically pretending the triggers are making her do things, basically that she’s sexually roleplaying a ‘hypnoslut’? If that’s the case and he thinks she’s consenting he’s much less of an asshole – basically another victim of the ghost. Just thinking about alternate character interpretation really.
I actually laughed at the ghost’s slight exasperation in wanting to do more recordings but he can’t due to the temporary muteness thing.
For the scene at the end – I like how John’s basically got this note and comes in to play the role Ronja supposedly wants him to play, double checks she’s into it, and then makes she gets a lot out of it too – while with Jonathan she kind of gets something out of it as a byproduct. Then he lets her out of the bondage afterward – I bet he’s finding the days when he didn’t keep finding his stepsister in heavy bondage an increasingly distant memory.
I hopefully will get onto part 6 a little quicker – I have been busy writing and re-writing myself, but this is a great fun story with lots of differing interesting elements and some great hot ideas. Still want to see the Ghost get beaten in the end.
Chapter 4 review WARNING CONTAINS SPOILERS.
Well, ended up being longer than expected to get to read this! That’s because the only day I wasn’t writing myself I was getting drunk because of what I had written.
Well, it certainly starts where it left off! I hope Roy has access to a lot of clean fresh water. The poor guy must be dehydrated! Ronja’s been getting fucked senseless all night, but seems to have enjoyed the experience which is pretty cool – it’s neither her fault nor Roy’s, so she got what she could out of it. Definitely feel like seeing the ghost get his comeuppance though, he is such an asshole and easy to dislike! The way he’s messing with her clothes and shredding poor Maria’s skirt... I get being stuck in a mirror is boring, but what a dick! Of course, you need a bad guy like that to make this kind of story work which makes him perfect for it. Wouldn’t work with Ned Flanders.
Ronja’s humiliation when John comes in, and the description of what he’s seeing, especially all the cum over her pussy, is all very well written. With him up masturbating all night watching Maria, I guess Ronja’s lucky he’s too drained to try and take advantage – plus, he does seem like a more decent guy than the ghost. It feels like he’s not really taking the spell’s power seriously, even though he’s getting the visions, at least until the end of the chapter...
Also, wow, that hypnotic trigger to make her call Roy master – it’s a neat touch and suddenly there’s a bit of suspense as to what else triggers might make her say.
With the discussion about the clothes later – I like how the ghost’s got it all worked out – but it was quite funny how his main thoughts were around the videos he’s wanting Ronja to star in, and what makes the scenes more realistic. He’s like a repressed porn director or arthouse guy, it makes him seem a little bit nerdy although still sinister – after all extending financial control over Ronja is another nasty thing he’s got.
Another bit that struck me as amusing – Mikaela’s line about how Ronja’s style of dress will basically make it pointless to blackmail her. It’s got kind of an exasperated air to it. Yeah, she’s taking advantage too, but a threesome with her Ronja and Maria sounds hot, so with her being a blackmailer you can see why she goes for it – it fits the character you have established for her really well. That sneak shot of Ronja bending for the envelope was slyly done, too. She’s a heck of a professional pervert is Mikaela. While the ghost is pretty creepy, with Mikaela is more amusing despite the blackmail theme, because of how many times she’s taking advantage with pictures, and stuff like her being chased off by Roy earlier.
The scene with Jonathan is really hot –how she has to keep her hands on the table, and answers that she’s been fantasising, but the best bit is when he makes her think there’s other students watching and she just can’t see them and it gets her off quicker. That kind of mind play is surprisingly hot. I really enjoyed it.
...and then at the end of the chapter John gets hit with the spell and suddenly he has a lot more understanding of what he’s been doing. Heh, Maria gets to believe too with that image of him dildo’ing himself. It’s a good scene at the end although the earlier one with Jonathan is the hottest in the chapter. I really liked that line "Maria, stop sucking if you hear me stop moaning," it’s great! Making sure he doesn’t get too selfish while getting blown by his stepsister’s girlfriend. It’s also funny how it goes from Ronja trying to bring up the idea of the threesome with Mikaela to actually having one with John.
All in all another quality chapter with a smoking hot hypno-sex scene.