Outreach by InvidiaRed
This was a very sweet story. You know, when I read fics you've written, the style, the elite word usage and complicated thought processes make me very curious about what's happening in that brain of yours. I mean that in a good way. Your writing is very different from anything I've read before. It's a lot to take in, a lot of jumping back and forth so I had trouble following/understanding what was happening, but once I kinda caught onto the rhythm of it, and that little romance began to spark, it managed to pull at my heartstrings and ended beautifully.
Awesome job.
Outreach
Beautiful, just beautiful. You play with language like a master, and it's delightful to see how you coax words into new patterns. And this world of yours--so unique, and painful, and full of terrible beauty.
Thank you!
A Xenophiliac’s Christmas Carol – Cuss words? Zounds! Gaszooks! ‘pon my fob, can such filth be?
I had to look up the actual meaning of Lacuna, because all I could think of was the band Lacuna Coil. I wondered if it was a reference since, having tentacles, Lacuna can presumably coil ‘em? Overall point of view is that Lacuna’s an asshole, broken heart or no. Jeff and Marsha’s wishes made me laugh! There’s a good sense of humor throughout the whole story. Lot of great lines like that. The Elfboy’s just made of zany hilarity, and then the big guy’s uh, over enthusiasm was laugh out loud hilarious. Third ghost... definitely mood whiplash there, but it fits the whole Christmas Carol theme! Nice bit of nastiness from the Grey. Didn’t expect the ending! Could almost have fit in as a Halloween story.
I was under the impression Extany was already infected from the get go. Breeder venom and the parasite.Since the ghost of the future shows him what will happen. Lacuna is just him hallucinating.
This little gem was my favorite.
“Yugh! Jesus Christ, Extany: I’ve been on you twenty-four-seven; how do you still smell like cum?” She wrinkled her nose as she touched his face and looked at her fingers. “You’re sticky... You need a shower. And probably an exorcist.”
Jello.
Good thing nobody was vegetarian or this operation would’ve been a bust.” haha. interesting to read.
BronxWench. You're gonna give people cavities with stories that sweet. Haha <3
A Xenophiliac’s Christmas Carol by PlagueClover (aka CloverReef)
Good, creative, and less bloody than mine. Somehow I wanted more action from the alien (whom I'm picturing as a Khajit).
A Xenophiliac’s Christmas Carol
This was entirely perfect! I don't even know where to begin fangirling here... Extany is unforgettably, unapologetically, deliciously slutty, and Lacuna is so very judgmental about it all, isn't he? I'll bet Dickens wishes his version was this good.
I love to pick out my favorite lines, but I have a tie here. A three-way tie...
First:
Extany gagged. “Oh fuck, a Freudian elf.”
Second:
“Uh...” The giant’s arms cautiously relaxed. “You’re drooling.”
Extany gulped. “Gimmie a few seconds and I’ll be hard as rock too.”
Third:
“You’re sticky... You need a shower. And probably an exorcist.”
Screw Dickens--I like your version much better! :hugs:
Jello
Right, note to self... never eat at Desi's house... especially dessert.
I loved the way you set this up, with the Thanksgiving Day sale madness that ushers in the holiday season firmly in place, even in your world of religious fervor and occasional naked people. :D I also loved the reception when she got home, and the absolutely maddening confusion of fmaily talking at cross purposes, because that's just the holidays, isn't it? Of course, most of us aren't going to have quite the same ending to our holiday gatherings...
Love it!
Nothing to Sneeze At - BronxWench
Ending was good. Though I confess I'm not keen on a lot of exposition, to me, that's a symptom of a bigger story wanting to be unleashed where each of he points can be given the space they deserve--well, you've got another nanowrimo project! :)