Skitty Chapter 4
Well, two lemons! I wasn't expecting that! I know you said Joma and I are in sync when it comes to fetishes, but this chapter is a fork in the road. He is a dog person, I am for SURE of the feline persuasion. So, going off the fact that the rabbits and now Snowdrift have had their turn, I can only hope that Athena gets it on with the King soon.
That's not to say I hated the Neva lemon. Body worship is a very underutilized kink, and it totally makes sense that Joma would want a girl like Neva to be more than just another set of holes. Her 'worship' worship of Jace was also very well done, as would be expected from a being like Snowdrift who would be able to sense she was in trouble and Jace saved her.
But then we get to the Alice lemon....WOW. Just...that went from saucy date talk to straight up sister fucking FAST. Not that I'm complaining. Now all that needs to happen is Jace needs to "recruit" Angelica, and then the three siblings team up on Laura.
Can't wait to see whats next!
IBTS
Skitty Chapter 2 review
Wow!! So he WASN'T going crazy!! I guess the W token is like...some kind of genie lamp? He thinks "I wish..." and BOOM! At his castle. Very interesting that the castle seems to be inhabited soley by people Jace knows. Maybe Valerius (sorry if I butchered the spelling) is Jace's dad? Grandpa? Third Grade gym teacher?
Now, the talk about Rosemary being a hoity toity bitch in the real world getting translated to the castle world makes me think that Jace "fixing the problem" in his castle will "fix the problem" in the real world. Although I also can't help but think that with lines like "the Jace of this world knew how to please Aliss", our Real world Jace is actually taking over the body of an ACTUAL king in an ACTUAL world where everyone just so happens to look like people our Jace knows. Kinda reminds me of that one Gravity Falls story you did, where Dipper took over the bodies of other Dippers in the Multi-verse.
As for the sex itself, MMMMM-MMMM!!! It's a personal fetish of mine, watchin (or in this case reading) a high and mighty BITCH get BROUGHT DOWN and reminded of her place. Stories of Jaune Arc taming Cinder Fall and Weiss Schnee are my go-tos for that kind of itch, although this chapter will now be joining my mainstays :-3
Having Aliss demind the haughty Dutchess put to words what her body was feeling as the King took her to the moon was unexpectedly hot. As was (and I'm assuming will be) the juxtaposition of this mideval/fantasy/DnD style world, but all the women wearing seemingly modern day undergarments/lingerie. I love it
As for the other thing I liked...Is Coin of the Realm a real game? You saying it's a resource based game makes me think of Catan, obviously, but is it an actual product? Or is it another well thought out product that doesn't actually exist, but totally should? Like the "Nuke Em!" commercial from the original Robocop.
The last thing I will say about this chapter is, if THIS is the quality of only the SECOND chapter, I can only shudder in pure joy and need as I imagine whats coming up next.
IBTS
(IttyBittyTittySkitty)
Heh, I can't blame Jace's family for being a bit shocked by the appearance of his "special servants" in the house, and I have to wonder if that helped use up their adrenalin and numb them at least to the mindfuck of it all – in turn letting them fully enjoy the actualfuck after actualfuck. It's lovely to see that the pets are eager to care for all of Jace's loved ones just as much, and the bit about Angela getting to indulge in her canine side a bit more worked out beautifully. The various activities around the room were easy to keep track of too, every one great erotic fun.
As for Duane's Wishful experience… I'm actually glad you left that an open mystery, both for some fun thoughts to linger and also to keep with Valerius' respect for all of the owners' innermost fantasies. Again, it's fun to wonder what he would see as my greatest unspoken wish. (Probably not what anyone I know would guess, and perhaps not even something I'd expect.)
Let's just hope the final reward isn't too powerful, as it would be hard to explain why Traffic Copter 5 landed in his backyard two or three times a week. (“Oh, she's just here to see my new baby. …sister! Baby sister!” Oh boy, then he'd really need some pointers from Lincoln Loud.) Thank you for such a fun & intriguing tale of erotic fantasy.
(Chapter 8)
I like to think that, at least subconsciously, Jace took the story of Valerius' sins of selfishness to heart in giving Duane something so precious in his time of need. Perhaps Mrs. Vogel died of a heart attack from so much vigorous fun after unlocking the greatest magic. Also, I think it was good of Valerius to keep his clients' confidence, though I do wish Jace had at least told Valerius about Mrs. Vogel's passing. (Sure, maybe he already knew, but it's clear that they spent a lot of time together before Jace got the coin.)
As for Angelica and her various ratcheting-ever-higher confessions, the sexy outcome was delicious. I too am relieved that the real sister wasn't asking for the humiliation stuff, and tying in the werewolf angle was a great way to continue the animalistic fun. (How long before she starts bringing costumes into it though?) Voyeurism was pretty much a given, though recording it all is a pretty dangerous step. Also, I'm definitely of the same mind as Joma that even with the story there's no way Alice and Laura slept through the screaming, crashing fun. The next family meal may be a bit awkward but at least everyone's cards (likely followed by naked, heaving, sweaty bodies) will be on the table.
Anyway, I'm sure that friends and neighbors will be delighted to attend whenever the Lymans invite them over to watch their home movies.
Oh, and Angelica is actively hoping for things to work out with Rosemary? Heh, no doubt Jace will always be able to count on his fourteen-year-old sister to inject more pervy spice into his love life regardless of what or whom he's doing at the time.
Thanks for another sexy and revealing chapter, and I really look forward to seeing how things tie together in the end.
I have a feeling that storm was 100% due to Jace and his escapades.
To give Angelica the perfect reason to go into his room and confess.
And dear lord was that confession HOT!!! I loved every bit of it, including the Wolf role play. I can only imagine that Laura and Alice heard all of that rutting, and were probably pleasing themselves to it, or helping themselves to each other.
Giving Duane the Wishful pass seems like the kind of sacrifice needed to unlock the greatest magic of the Wishful, and so I'm hoping and hoping that that scream at the end is something sexy and not something horrible.
Regardless, that chapter was incredible, amd so has the entire story! As much as I will hate to see this story end, it had been amazing watching you take my simple request and turn it into this masterpiece. Thank you so much.
Joma
(Chapter 7)
Oh, so Valerius was eventually wise enough to turn his personal Hell into Heaven, and using only the magic of his wisdom. It also obviates the need to wish him his freedom… not like anyone would fantasize about that anyway. :) Also, the "his will be known to him or not" was a nice insight about Jace's idle fantasies, however slight or repressed. BTW, I can think of only two metals that the token could become next.
Nice of his shy little sister to finally ask for, almost demand, what she wanted from her brother, and you did a beautiful job describing how lovely their first time was. The running description of her body as she was undressing made a nice striptease of it too. (Also, even if you hadn't mentioned the inspiration I think any fan would realize it here. :) ) The moment I read the design of Lady Angel's black & blue panties I had a hunch what her latent kink was, even if only hinted at strongly during the "whore" phase of their lovemaking. If it bleeds over to the real world, Angel's submissive streak may make for an interesting dynamic.
As for the storm, something tells me Jace Lyman needs to be concerned about the real world just as much as King Jace needs to deal with the impending war. Maybe his sexual escapades will cause problems at home, or maybe getting his job back will bring new challenges from a resentful boss. (Though I'm sure Valerius could help Jace go into business for himself if the need arises… just without the whole destroying-people's-lives thing.) Regardless of where or what, it'll be fun to find out. Thanks for more of this great story.
(Chapter 7)
Wow. Just...just WOW.
That was fucking INCREDIBLE.
I honestly liked the explanation as to who Valerius is/was, and how the token played into it, and the whole baby-face turn from being the asshole he was to truly enjoying helping people find their desires.
And now on to the Angel lemon. Sheer. Fucking. Perfection.
I can say, with all honesty, that it is now my new favorite lemon from you.
It's really hard for me to believe that this story started out as me requesting a simple "porn-no plot" one off from you.
Thank you. For being the kick ass writer you are, for writing this amazing story, for being a great friend.
Joma
...hmm? What's this at the end? Oh, it's Jace's boss calling him back! Oh sweet! Jack ass is gone, AND Jace gets his job back! Well, everything is coming up roses! Everything is going to be fi-
...you son of a BITCH.
(lol jk)
Chapter 6
Ah, finally getting to a little exposition, both his ability to control the magic a bit and/or who's really in charge. I kind of thought Valerius' suggestion for how to run the interrogation was a bit …odd. (Before the reveal I'd have used a stronger word.) I just wasn't going to complain because the whole thing turned out to be so much fun. :)
(Hit review too soon!)
WOW. What a cliffhanger. Is it his dad?
Another great part! His enhanced interrogation techniques are the most effective way of pumping for interrogation I've seen in a while. The new gals sounded incredibly hot - especiall the spy gal. Wowsers. I also laughed out loud at his thought about his chambermaids being awesomely slutty.
Anyway, still loving this story. Great to see you coming back to it!
Maaaaaaann!!! From out of nowhere, You go and do it!! Bring in the Spy girl, have Jace fuck two of his fucking sexy chambermaids, have him fuck the ever living hell out of the spy girl...
But STILL no lady angel???And now a massive cliffhanger to make the last cliffhanger look like a little mound of dirt!! You’re a cruel cruel genius, Glass. A cruel cruel Genius. Especially because now it will be closer to Christmas before this gets wrapped up. Still, I absolutely LOVED this chapter!!