This was an incredibly hot story. The happy ending was really beautiful. Great job!
Finally got time to check the ending for this story and I am happy to say that chapter six is lots of improvement compared to the previous chapter. Lots of sex and just about every kink hinted in the story tags realized. Probably the best chapter so far in my opinion. Given the preg tag of the story it is kind of given how it will develop and end, but I still found it to be a very satisfing ending for the chapter and the story.
If there are anyone out there that are having second thougths about reading the story due to the rape and anal tags I suggest reading chapter 1-4 + 6 will basically give you the whole story but dodge those parts that are not Mia using mind controll to give herself the opportunity to knock up females.
Since part 6 is the final chapter - COMPLETE tag needed? :p - I'll go for a 100% spoiler free review.
Fuckin' loved it. Great finale to end on. I'm sure some readers guesed where it was going, but I didn't!
I love the little ways you've tied this in with the previous parts and the way the story of the best day of Mia's life relies on a past part.
The sex is incredibly hot, helped on hugely by the dialogue and also for the main central scene the overriding theme of what's happening and to who.
Finally, the proper actual ending is just all kinds of gooey sweet and not in a smutty way. I loved it!
Great work there GeorgeGlass.
Checked out chapter 5 and it is well written but I get mixed feelings from reading this.
The setup with the trip and Mia getting bound was very promising and hot...I was expecting her being bound creating the situation where she could not direct the action to get her climax and their actions just triggering her to release more and more fermones that draw them into more and more sex but without them realizing that getting Mia off can get them out of the trap.
I think the thing that rubbed me in wrong way with what I found instead was that when we get to the actual action there is a blackout and a bit of guessing game afterwards about what actually happened. Not that I am so much into rapes stories so that a blow-by-blow account of the rape is a must, but the narrative suggest that what she did to Mitzi is a large part of her worst day and we don't get to actually see it. It felt kind of disappointing, but I do look forward to upcoming chapters of this story since I think Mia and her evil acts are great story material.
Chapter 5 – Some spoilers.
My literal reaction at the end of this chapter was “Holy. Shit. That was brutal.” Sure, there’s a rape tag on the story but this is the first part that was really rough stuff. There’s just the right amount of detail of what happens with the rest left to the imagination and it really works.
The scene just before then, with the binding, and exposure and driving Mia into that state is absolutely one of the hottest scenes in the whole story. That was definitely an instant regret situation for the one responsible, wasn’t it? The fact that she gets away and doesn’t help the one who helps here does kind of cement her as a bit of a bitch, even after sexually assaulting the other girl, but hard to feel she deserved something as rough as that. Hot to read to though! Gotta love fantasy.
One line that made me smile earlier, “I saw you checking out Megan Schaefer’s big ol’ booty like you wanted to eat it for breakfast.” Heh.
The end is pretty chilling, too, when Mia is talking about how she partly wishes she could remember more of it. With that girl who bore the brunt of it all being such a nice innocent girl you want to hope she didn’t end up broken and traumatized, but after hours of Mia going nuts on her...
Overall, great chapter! Different in tone to the previous parts but certainly an essential look into what Mia could be if she didn’t take all the care she does to fuck regularly. It’s really an example of the curse side of her body.
I look forward immensely to the next part!
I have been looking around for some story of yours that suits my interests and this story caught my interest. This story sounded quite similar to one of my own stories and I was not disappointed. A dickgirl that really have some serious confessions to make and you manage to get some good really sex scenes a long the way even if the particular "powers" in play make it very easy for her arrange for things to happen.
The scenes with Rachel and Fay were extra nice. I really look forward to the next chapter
I am so glad you're still writing this story. I love how it jumps from current day, to the past and back again. Your sex scenes are amazing but even better I like that despite her being an asshole, I actually like Mia and genuinely want to know more about her past and present. Looking forward to the next update.
Part 4 review - just out of curiousity, do you want me to post the spoilery thoughts I send in the email or keep sticking with the spoiler free ones?
Anyway, enjoyed the heck out of part 4! Two girls-of-the-chapter to meet with Fay sticking out as an especial hotty. Not a spoiler at this point to mention Mia coming in someone, and one of the very hottest bits in this story is definitely the reaction the first time Mia comes in someone in this part! The strip poker game is fun and sexy good and quick, too.
This is some quality dickgirl fantasy right here!
Really liked chapter 3, couldn't find a negative, so spoiler free like... The dialogue between Mia and Lorraine at the end was really fuckin' hot.