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for The Accidental Babysitter

by Paperbackwriter

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 28, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Boy that escalated quickly. 

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 27, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Awesome chapter. Love it.

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 27, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Derrick gets into situations he has no power over. This screams for drama. Plus if Jenna or any other girl/woman start to make him commit or make any serious move on him things will get wild. Can Avalon compete and give him what he needs? Can Derrick do the same for her? 

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 25, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I agree with WildNtwisted. Plus the writing style really is fun to read. I wonder what Avalons goals are with Derrick. Is he just her boyfriend Plus we got Jenna here too. She seem at this point very under developed.

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Poor Dirk got sucked into the danger zone of seduction. Its like a mine field out there.

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 22, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Nice Chapter. I wonder if Avalon is a bit jealous now that her boyfriend has another girl. Maybe a triangle relationship is just beginning to start. 

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 21, 2018 at 12:00 AM

The Alice reveal was a nice surprise. Is there a chance Derrick would try something with Alice as a distraction from Avalon? Or with any other milfs in his neighborhood? Keep it up. This has some awesome twist and turns. 

person Loth-Cat
schedule February 19, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Interesting story. Dont rush it. Keep this up. This has real potencial.

person garvo
schedule February 17, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Very cute story so far! Looking forward to seeing where it goes