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for Moon Child

by sexiestofoffenders

person Aariana
schedule March 30, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Good story. Please continue writing it!!

schedule September 1, 2017 at 12:00 AM

This story has a good start, and I'll definitely be watching for more.

I just have one bit of advice though... it's proper to put puncutation in the speaking parts.  For example, "No Maha, I won’t run anymore, it’s over now”, there should be a period at the end of the sentence. I'm not criticizing, I just wanted to mention it. :)