Such an amazing story!! I really like the way you write. This story made me smile so damn much, and what a great ending too! Thanks so much for sharing.
I really liked this. Like, I really really liked this. It was adorable and super hot all at once, and I feel like your writing style has a pretty strong foundation. I do, however, have 2 little pieces of concrit. I don't like to give advice no one asked for, though, so I'll wrap them up in neat little brackets so you can easily ignore them.
[This kinda bashes people over the head with shameless vulgar words, which is a good thing. Wink wink. I love that about your writing. Though it might have more impact and shine more if you save the bashing over the head for choice moments, like when things get heated.
Your pacing is pretty rushed, but since your writing is pretty strong, it's an easy fix. Pick out the parts you really want to showcase, like important parts of the scenes, and flesh them out with more description of body language (including important microexpressions) emotion, sensory stuffs, thoughts, etc.]
Anyway, I hope that was mostly painless! I loved your main character, and I love how friggin rough it gets. Stay shameless ;)