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for No Surrender! No Retreat!

by Tcr

schedule June 1, 2017 at 12:00 AM

That was sad, but I guess we were expecing an ending like that. I really liked the detail of the gun being kicked away and lost in the rush of soliders. It was FUCKING DEPRESSING! Like 'There goes all hopes and dreams!' Well fml, I quite enjoyed that. The image of the gun disappearing, as Yevgenyia was killed will stay with me... The names were definately hard to prononounce though and I gave them little nicknames so I wasn't constantly stumbling over them. 

Nice job! Nice example of one-shotting lol!!!

schedule March 25, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Wow, that was intense.  Well-written, disturbing which I'm sure was your intent.  Good job with the prompt words!