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for Collateral Damage

by DrkDreamer

schedule May 1, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Ah! All this tension with Talya and Trance ;). I can't wait till Micah arrives! Thanks for the update - you have me on the edge of my seat. I can't wait to read more

person Dm
schedule April 10, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I remember reading the first draft of this story with Talya being taken from the temple and then I left it for a long time.  Since then, I have recently started reading this story & am engrossed!  It's so well written and the characterisation is very good.  Whilst perspective does on occasion jump around, the sheer depth to this story is excellent.  Am currently on chapter 17 and am reluctant to keep reading becuase I know there's so far only 20 chapters!

Couple of questions: how many chapters do you forsee for this story & what time period do you see this as set in?  Reading it, I see it as the early modern period.  

Anyway, please keep up-dating this as am loving it!

schedule April 7, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Hmm... interesting chapter.  Both Talya and Trance feeling attracted to each other, yet so confused by that attraction.  I wonder what will happen....

schedule April 5, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Great chapter! Thanks so much for updating. I really look forward to this story. I cannot even imagine how it's all going to end, but I'm sure it'll be great 

schedule April 5, 2018 at 12:00 AM

More trouble for Talya! The poor boy is too sweet and pretty for his own good sometimes. Trace could be better than Micah for Talya though. I look forward to seeing what happens! Thanks for the update.

schedule March 4, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Sorry for not reviewing sooner, but I missed the updates of the last four chapters, and had to catch up. :)

Mallika was quite the... um, brat... at first, but I was happy to see things changing throughout chapter 19.  It was good to see things going much smoother and Micah feeling free.  Everyone... well, maybe not Rael, semed much happier with the way things were running now.  Although I wonder how Priya will take things now that Mallika is gone and Micah is in charge... and will be changing things from the sound of it.

And Rael... hopefully the army will straighten that boy out.  He defintiely seemed like an angry boy that liked things his way and was not enjoying the fact that his father was back for good and was going to change things.  Well, wake up call my friend... Micah is the head of the household, and can do what he wants.

I'm really liking how this story is coming along.  I'll defintely be keeping a better eye out for updates so I don't get behind again. :)

schedule February 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I am really enjoying the continuing twists and turns of Talya's story, and how he has influenced Micah. Now I just have to worry about Talya's health.

You have made the transitions of Talya's life very realistic and now I need to see what else you have in store for him.

schedule February 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I love how this story is turning and out so curious to see what Micah will do with Talya...and what Talya will choose. Your writing is amazing! 

On another note, please don't let a lack of reviews or reads discourage you from writing. You are so talented - I think that sooner or later this story will get the exposure it truly deserves. Keep your head up! 

schedule February 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Oh! I also wanted to suggest maybe uploading on Wattpad? I started reading there and I think it may get a bit more traffic. I know it would be a lot of work, but just a suggestion! 

person Zlott
schedule February 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I created an account here specifically to say I love this story and wait (impatiently) for each new addition, I have to say a little gutted he took another lover while away and justified it by saying Talya would never know, but I am hoping they will soon get their happily ever after