It's been a very long time since I have found anything here to read that has caught my attention, but I am really enjoying this story. Jude is a very intriging character. I look forward to reading more.
OK, now that I have followed this story so far it might be about time to leave a little comment. A very rare thing for me to do, so whatever follows, please see it as a comliment from the start.
What made me take a look at the story in the first place was the title. It is pretty unusual and rather creative. Normally I am not that much into any kind of slave story, as they are almost all full of clichees, unbelievable characters, forseseable storylines.
To my pleasant surprise I found that you stay clear of most of these sandtraps. Your characters function well in your setting, they have a realistic feel about them. And I also like the time you give your protagonists to develop, the time you give us readers to dive deeper into the world and people you have created. With Rhys and Jude you have two very interesting characters and I am looking forwards to seeing where you will take them (and us respectively) in the course of the story.
Gustin has been the only downer so far, a character that normally makes me avoid slave stories, a chlichee in every move he does, every word he says. The young, beautiful boy who gets slaved and doesn't need long to actually like what is being done to him. I mean, come on! I have to admit that I was kind of annoyed by Gus and started skipping the parts with him. So it really was an excellent idea to give him a POV chapter and make him more real by this. He might annoy me less now :-)
Last but not least I find it refreshing to read a story with such an abundance of words. The English language is full of wonderful words and they are meant to be used, not only to be stored in dictionaries! There is nothing more boring and irritating than reading a story with only a couple of words repeated again and again. But to find "albeit" acutally used in a text is a rare and nice thing.
I hope there will be new chapters frequently, but please also take your sweet time - I'd rather wait a few days longer for a decent quality.
Thanks for the story so far!
Laegwen
Oh, I love this Chapter from Gustin's POV. Looking forward to the next update!
!!! Love seeing things from Guston's view. I'm glad to know he has a brain after all. I like how he manipulated Jude.
Guston is young and vulnerable even though he is more intelligent than he first seemed. I'm worried that he'll get sick of being in Jude's room. Gus doesn't understand the danger he's in or how dangerous Luce is. He thinks her slaves are spoiled.
I'm most as frustrated as Gus. Lol. I was all ready for a steamy scene.
Nice updates (Chps. 9&10)! I was surprised that Jude bought Gustin, and wonder if it was because he likes the boy, and wanted to get him away from the cruelty of the brothel, or because it's a useful distraction from Rhys. I liked the chaper from Gustin's POV, it was nice to get things from his perspective. Really good story so far, can't wait for more!
Thank you for another update. I was waiting for it. And please keep going with the story until you finish. I'm really, really hooked to it. I'm afraid what Lucilla will do to Rhys and what Jude will do about it.
Loving the new chapter (Ch. 8)! This is turning into such a good story... can't wait for more! :)
Poor Guston! Anyone else feel horrible for the little slave? I'm still deciding if I like Jude. He is quite the enigma yet his responses all make sense.
Thank you for the quick updates!
Another great chapter, I liked the setting for it. More glimpses into Rhys' past, so thank you! Now I'm curious, was his lover killed because of him, or if circumstances just caused his lover to die and he was framed?
Can't wait for Judes next POV and what he will do next. I appreciate the honesty your characters have, they are not clueless to the world around them, while still being naive in their own ways. I also enjoy the personalities and attitudes you have given to the rest of Lucilla's boys, though I am wondering if all of them are as contrite and trapped as they seem. If they are it would be refreshing, a lot of what I have been looking for on my reading lately has been on a complete sadistic bent.
Also, thanks for your quick updating! It can be so hard.